Hi All, I reviewed the "I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model ." This draft is well done for moving forward.
There are some editorial comments below: [Abstract in Page 1] In here, the "an administrative domain" is used just one time. The definition of "administrative domain" should be provided in appropriate chapter. Or please give the example like I2NSF User group. [Chapter 3.2 in Page 8] "VoCN" acronym is used at first. So, full words should be provided about the "VoCN." and related references should be also described in the reference chapter. [Chapter 4.4 in Page 14] "The URLn-Group object SHALL have ~~~~" was described. "URLn-Group" is maybe typo of "URL-Group." [Chapter 5.1 in Page 15] I think that "Signatures" should be kept carefully in a secure manner. This draft said that this issue is out of scope. Even though this issue is out of scope, this draft should show the proper references. I think that the DID, blockchain, and etc are good solutions. [Chapter 12.1 in Page 69] - xxx-semantics-19.txt >> RFC9110 - xxx-monitoring-data-model-19.txt >> xxx-monitoring-data-model-20.txt [Chapter 12.1 in Page 70] - xxx-rfc4960-bis-19.txt >> RFC9260 Thanks. Best Regards, Jungsoo, PARK On Mon, Jul 25, 2022 at 10:32 PM 최윤철 <cy...@etri.re.kr> wrote: > Hi I2NSF WG, > > I reviewed the I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model. > This draft is well written and ready to be progressed for publication. > > One comment below. > > In '4.1.2. NSF access Information' an example of access information is > described by including VLAN. > But, in '5 Data Model' NSF access information, it was described only with > IP and port. > It would be good to add VLAN as an option in '5 Data Model' NSF access > information > > > > -----Original Message----- > From: "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.p...@gmail.com> > To: "Penglin Yang" <yangpeng...@chinamobile.com>; "Meiling Chen" < > chenmeil...@chinamobile.com>; > Cc: "JungSoo Park" <p...@etri.re.kr>; "Yunchul Choi" <cy...@etri.re.kr>; > "Patrick Lingga" <patricklink...@gmail.com>; "Jeong Hyeon Kim" < > jeonghyeonki...@gmail.com>; "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" < > jaehoon.p...@gmail.com>; > Sent: 2022-07-19 (화) 20:49:27 (UTC+09:00) > Subject: Request for I2NSF Draft Review > > Hi Penglin and Meiling, > How are you nowadays? > > I need reviewers for I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model and > I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model under I2NSF WGLC: > > - I2NSF Consumer Facing Interface YANG Data Model > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-consumer-facing-interface-dm-21 > > - I2NSF Registration Interface YANG Data Model > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-registration-interface-dm-18 > > Could each of you review one of them, respectively, this week? > > If you can do it, you can give your review comments to the I2NSF mailing > list. > > With this review, it will be helpful for you to proceed with > our I2NSF remote attestation draft. > > Thanks. > > Best Regards, > Paul > -- > =========================== > Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D. > Associate Professor > Department Head > Department of Computer Science and Engineering > Sungkyunkwan University > Office: +82-31-299-4957 > Email: paulje...@skku.edu, jaehoon.p...@gmail.com > Personal Homepage: http://iotlab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php > <http://cpslab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php> > _______________________________________________ > I2nsf mailing list > I2nsf@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/i2nsf >
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