Jeff, thanks for the thorough review.
On the editorial matters, the edit to the definition of I2RS Plane seems
somewhat off. I understand why you did not like referring to it as the
environment for the "process", particularly since there are multiple
"processes" involved. But one does not run an "architecture" in an
environment either. How about defining it as "The environment the I2RS
components" are running on."? Or maybe "The connected set of I2RS
components" since the I2RS Plane is really that communication, not the
underlay.
It is a bit awkward for either the authors or the WG to review the other
notes, as apparently they are in the git but not in the diff (since they
are only in the XML.)
Yours,
Joel
On 5/17/16 7:46 PM, Jeffrey Haas wrote:
Authors,
Upon review of the environment security requirements, I found a number of
items to comment upon. Since the majority of these were spelling or
grammar, I chose to simply provide you a diff.
https://github.com/jhaas-pfrc/i2rs-2016/blob/jhaas/draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs-01-comments/draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs/draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs.xml
The above github link will take you to a repository containing your draft
with edits. The "master" branch contains the IETF sourced .xml and .txt
files. Thus, you can clone this repository and get access to the diff.
Please note I have flagged some issues within the .xml as XXX JMH and that
these issues require separate attention.
I am also attaching a rfcdiff showing the suggested edits.
-- Jeff
On Mon, Apr 04, 2016 at 01:01:01PM -0700, [email protected] wrote:
A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
This draft is a work item of the Interface to the Routing System of the IETF.
Title : I2RS Environment Security Requirements
Authors : Daniel Migault
Joel Halpern
Susan Hares
Filename : draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs-01.txt
Pages : 19
Date : 2016-04-04
Abstract:
This document provides environment security requirements for the I2RS
architecture. Environment security requirements are independent of
the protocol used for I2RS. As a result, the requirements provided
in this document are intended to provide good security practise so
I2RS can be securely deployed and operated.
These security requirements are designated as environment security
requirements as opposed to the protocol security requirements. The
reason to have separate document is that protocol security
requirements are intended to help the design of the I2RS protocol
whether the environment requirements are rather intended for
deployment or implementations.
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