Hi, Ben:
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draft-ietf-i2rs-yang-l2-network-topology-14: (with COMMENT)

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Why is the "management-address" for a l2-node an IP address?  Does that exclude 
any potential use of this data model for non-IP networks?
[Qin]: No, it doesn't. management address is used to setup management channel 
and provide management interface for the administrator.
Section 3

   o  Links in the "ietf-network-topology" module are augmented as well
      with a set of Layer 2 parameters, allowing to associate a link
      with a name, a set of Layer 2 link attributes, and flags.

Interesting that names for links were not part of the core network-topology 
module.  Are there any potential issues if other ntework types also specify a 
link name and there is disagreement between them?
[Qin]: core network-topology module defined in RFC8345 doesn't specify name but 
specify link-id, link-id should be unique among different network types,
For name defined in L2 topo, we follow the same design style for L3 topo, i.e., 
specify name for each L2 link which is optional attribute.
Section 4

It reads a little oddly to use the flag-identity as the base type of a typedef 
before the identity itself is declared, but I am way out of my league here and 
defer to the YANG experts.
[Qin]: pyang tool doesn't complain about this. If needed, we can change the 
order.
       description
         "VXLAN Network Identifier or VXLAN Segment ID.
          It allows up to 16 M VXLAN segments to coexist
          within the same administrative domain.

          The use of value '0' is implementation-specific.";

Is this intended as a nod to the use of 0 for the management VLAN?/ (I seem to 
recall this topic raising to some level of controversy in the discussions 
around draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan.)
[Qin]: See Martin's reply, thanks Martin.
     /*

      * Features
      */

nit: there seems to be a spurious blank line here.

     grouping l2-node-attributes {
         [...]
         leaf sys-mac-address {
           type yang:mac-address;
           description
             "System MAC address.";
         }

Is there only one "System MAC address" per node?
[Qin]:Yes, your are correct.
         leaf delay {
           type uint32;
           units "microseconds";
           description
             "Link delay in microseconds.";

I guess we don't expect to use this model for deep-space links :)
[Qin] Correct.
       container l2-termination-point-attributes {
         description
           "Containing L2 termination point attributes.";
         leaf description {
           type string;
           description
             "Port description.";

Is a termination point always a "port", or should the description be modified?
[Qin]: I think port and l2 termination point is equivalent, we could change to 
layer 2 termination point description.
             list qinq {
               [...]
               leaf svlan-id {
                 type dot1q-types:vlanid;
                 description
                   "SVLAN ID.";
               }
               leaf cvlan-id {
                 type dot1q-types:vlanid;
                 description
                   "CVLAN ID.";

Could we perhaps expand "service" and "customer"?
[Qin]: Sure, will do as you suggested.
           }
           //case ethernet

RFC 6020 suggests that YANG comments are "C++-style", which would seem to 
indicate that the single-line comment could start on the same line as the 
closing brace.  This, in turn, would save some confusion since the block 
comments apply to the content after the comment, but these comments apply to 
the content before the comment.
(Also later on as well.)
[Qin]: Okay, will move single line comment to the end of closing brace.
         leaf tp-state {
           [...]
             enum others {
               value 4;
               description
                 "The termination point is in other state.";
             }

Is there a plan for how substructure of these "others" states might be added in 
the future?
[Qin]: Others means unknown termination point state.
Section 6

Thank you for updating the privacy considerations in response to the secdir 
review!

   In the case of a topology that is configured, i.e. whose origin is
   "intended", the undesired configuration could become effective and be

Perhaps toss the word "datastore" in here somewhere to remind the less-clueful 
reader (i.e., me) that origin is an NMDA concept?  Though if it's sufficiently 
obvious, no need to do it just for me.
[Qin] Correct, will add.
   reflected in the operational state datastore, leading to disruption
   of services provided via this topology might be disrupted.  For those

nit: deduplicate "disruption"/"disrupted".
[Qin]:Good catch.
   reasons, it is important that the NETCONF access control model is
   vigorously applied to prevent topology misconfiguration by
   unauthorized clients.

Should we condense "NACM" here since we provided the acronym at the start of 
the paragraph?
[Qin]: Okay.
   o  l2-node-attributes: A malicious client could attempt to sabotage
      the configuration of important node attributes, such as the name
      or the management-address.

I don't feel a need for a text change here (since "such as" suffices), but 
would a change to the node's MAC address be similarly impactful?
[Qin]: Yes, we could add if you think it needed.
   Some of the readable data nodes in this YANG module may be considered
   sensitive or vulnerable in some network environments.  It is thus
   important to control read access (e.g., via get, get-config, or
   notification) to these data nodes.  In particular, the YANG model for
   layer 2 topology may expose sensitive information, for example the
   MAC addresses of devices.  Unrestricted use of such information can

I think I've been told that in some environments the topology itself 
(especially VLAN/VXLAN identifiers) can be considered sensitive.  What's 
written here is consistent with that, and I don't insist on a change to the 
text, but wondered if that was seen as a common enough thing to be worth 
mentioning.
[Qin]: I think we could mention VLAN and VXLAN identifiers as sensitive 
information example.
Section 8.1

RFC 3688 could arguably be demoted to informative, as could RFC 7951.

Section 8.2

If we use types defined in [IEEE802.1Qcp], that seems like a normative 
reference to me.

Noting the discussion at
https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/normative-informative-references/
about even optional features still being normative references, I think RFC 7348 
would be better placed as a normative reference.  Note that there is not a 
process/downref issue in doing so, since it is already listed at 
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/downref/

I could go either way (informative or normative) for RFC 8342; presumably 
there's a convention to stick to.
[Qin]: Thanks, will see how to fix these references, thanks.
Appendix B

I was going to reference
https://www.iab.org/2016/11/07/iab-statement-on-ipv6/ and suggest IPv6 
addresses as example management-addresses, but I have a lingering memory that 
the IPv4 form is still used to identify nodes even in v6-only environments.  Do 
the right thing, of course.
[Qin]: Okay, will add IPv6 support in the JSON example.
[Note that I did not do an extensive consistency/sanity check on the example 
topology or try to reconstruct it from the JSON.]



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