I further note that [email protected] gets bounced by Nortel as a non-existant address. Is there an updated address?
On Sep 7, 2010, at 4:04 PM, Ben Campbell wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-netmod-dsdl-map-07 > Reviewer: Ben Campbell > Review Date: 2010-09-07 > IETF LC End Date: 2010-09-07 > IESG Telechat date: (if known) > > Summary: The draft is basically ready for publication as a proposed standard. > I have a few editorial comments and nits that should be considered if there > is another revision. > > Note: This draft delves deeply into XML esoterica, and I am far from an XML > expert. I assume the authors and work group feel this has had sufficient > review from XML experts (and as far as I know, they _are_ the experts). I > also assume the schemas, etc, have been mechanically verified. If not, I > suggest this be done as much as practical. > > Major issues: > > None > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > > -- Idnits complains about a number of normative references to external > documents. I don't know if that's a problem--I merely point it out for > consideration. It looks like it's mostly ISO docs, so I doubt there's an issue > > -- There are a number of acronyms that should be expanded on first use. E.g. > YANG, RELAX NG, XLST, etc. > > -- section 2.1, definition of "implicit node" > > Can a node be considered implicit if it is _not_ missing? If not, then the > "if missing" condition is non-contraining. > > -- section 3, 1st sentence: > > s/by/with > > -- section 9.1.1: > > Is it explicitly illegal for a mandatory node to have a default? > > -- section 9.1.1, third paragraph from the end: > > "...and only if..." seems non-constraining in context. > > -- section 13 > > This looks sort of light, when compared with the template in 3688. I'm not > exactly sure how to apply that to a namespace, since I guess there is no XML > to include, but it probably at least needs a registrant contact for each URL. > > -- Author's addresses: > > Is Rohan's affiliation current? _______________________________________________ Ietf mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ietf
