Shawn,
Thank you for the careful edits! I'll be going through your suggestions
early next week for the Getting Started.
Barbara


Shawn Walker wrote:

>On 16/10/2007, [EMAIL PROTECTED] <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
>  
>
>>Prototype gang,
>>
>>On the 1st page of the prototype Getting Started, I added a pointer to
>>"What is a Live CD?".  And, I added a link to the overall Indiana
>>documentation page on OpenSolaris.org
>>
>>Does anyone have suggestions about what you'd like me to add to the
>>Indiana main docs page before the prototype goes out? This page is still
>>very alpha-draft, lots to do there...
>>    
>>
>
>On this page:
>http://opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/Slim_Install/project_documents/slim_install_getstarted/
>
>The text:
>======
>"The Slim Install "Live CD" boots to a functional GNOME desktop. The
>desktop includes Firefox, Thunderbird, and other *core utilities*."
>
>I would say "core applications" instead of "core utilities."
>
>The text:
>======
>"You can invoke the Slim Installer by selecting the Installer icon on
>the desktop."
>
>...may be better worded as:
>"You can execute the Slim Installer using the Installer icon on the desktop."
>
>The text:
>======
>"The Slim Installer provides an initial installation of the CD
>contents to an x86 machine. The installed root(/) file system is ZFS."
>
>...may be better worded as:
>"The Slim Installer provides the ability to perform an initial
>installation of the CD's contents to an x86-based system. The
>installed root(/) file system is ZFS."
>
>The text:
>======
>"Note - This prototype uses only IPS packages, not SVR4 packages."
>
>...may be better worded as:
>"Note - This prototype only supports IPS packages."
>
>The text:
>======
>"The OpenSolaris Developer Preview includes the Image Packaging
>System. With IPS, you can select versioned builds of components to
>install and to create your own custom OpenSolaris distribution."
>
>...may be better worded as:
>"The OpenSolaris Developer Preview includes the Image Packaging
>System. With IPS, you can select versioned builds of components to
>manage or create your own custom OpenSolaris distribution using the
>Distribution Constructor tool."
>
>Thanks,
>  
>

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