Shawn, Thank you for the careful edits! I'll be going through your suggestions early next week for the Getting Started. Barbara
Shawn Walker wrote: >On 16/10/2007, [EMAIL PROTECTED] <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > >>Prototype gang, >> >>On the 1st page of the prototype Getting Started, I added a pointer to >>"What is a Live CD?". And, I added a link to the overall Indiana >>documentation page on OpenSolaris.org >> >>Does anyone have suggestions about what you'd like me to add to the >>Indiana main docs page before the prototype goes out? This page is still >>very alpha-draft, lots to do there... >> >> > >On this page: >http://opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/Slim_Install/project_documents/slim_install_getstarted/ > >The text: >====== >"The Slim Install "Live CD" boots to a functional GNOME desktop. The >desktop includes Firefox, Thunderbird, and other *core utilities*." > >I would say "core applications" instead of "core utilities." > >The text: >====== >"You can invoke the Slim Installer by selecting the Installer icon on >the desktop." > >...may be better worded as: >"You can execute the Slim Installer using the Installer icon on the desktop." > >The text: >====== >"The Slim Installer provides an initial installation of the CD >contents to an x86 machine. The installed root(/) file system is ZFS." > >...may be better worded as: >"The Slim Installer provides the ability to perform an initial >installation of the CD's contents to an x86-based system. The >installed root(/) file system is ZFS." > >The text: >====== >"Note - This prototype uses only IPS packages, not SVR4 packages." > >...may be better worded as: >"Note - This prototype only supports IPS packages." > >The text: >====== >"The OpenSolaris Developer Preview includes the Image Packaging >System. With IPS, you can select versioned builds of components to >install and to create your own custom OpenSolaris distribution." > >...may be better worded as: >"The OpenSolaris Developer Preview includes the Image Packaging >System. With IPS, you can select versioned builds of components to >manage or create your own custom OpenSolaris distribution using the >Distribution Constructor tool." > >Thanks, > > _______________________________________________ indiana-discuss mailing list [email protected] http://mail.opensolaris.org/mailman/listinfo/indiana-discuss
