I've completed my pre-IESG review of the document and have the following comments.
Overall, I think this document is good. The following comments are relatively minor and should be easy to address. The abstract could be better. For example, it might actually say what the recommendations are. :-) (see http://www.rfc-editor.org/policy.html.) Could use more references in places (e.g., NAT, NAT-PT, GTP-U, etc.) This is particularly true in the definitions section. > The GRPS core network elements shown in Figures 1 and 2 are the s/GRPS/GPRS/ It might be good to include some more background about the seattle meeting that led to this particular document. I'm thinking of a reader a couple of years from now who wasn't there and not knowing the background. Might be good to reference specific documents in 3GPP and or the time frame. This document is a reaction to 3GPP draft specs at a certain point in time that have since changed (or will be when folks later read this document). It would be good to make clear to the reader that this is the case. This comment is related to the previous paragraph as well. Also, would it make sense to add a section saying that 3GPP has adopted the changes? (i.e, and cite the meeting?) It might be good for the document to say that the ID has already achieved its main purpose and is being published for the historical record. The document has URLs embedded in the document. It would be better to put them all in the references section. Also, are they all stable? I suspect not. For example, the ARIN minutes reference no longer works... (I haven't checked the others.) There is an ongoing effort to define a set of requirements for cellular hosts [CELLREQ]. This work has been presented to the IPv6 WG, but has not been adopted as an IPv6 WG work item. This work should be continued within the working group, and may feed into a broader effort to define the requirements for all IPv6 nodes. Needs updating. Also is this too detailed for the the final RFC? Thomas -------------------------------------------------------------------- IETF IPng Working Group Mailing List IPng Home Page: http://playground.sun.com/ipng FTP archive: ftp://playground.sun.com/pub/ipng Direct all administrative requests to [EMAIL PROTECTED] --------------------------------------------------------------------
