On Thu, 3 Jun 2004 [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories. > This draft is a work item of the IP Version 6 Working Group Working Group of the > IETF. > > Title : IP Version 6 over PPP > Author(s) : S. Varada, D.Haskins > Filename : draft-ietf-ipv6-over-ppp-v2-00.txt > Pages : 0 > Date : 2004-6-3 [...] > http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-ipv6-over-ppp-v2-00.txt
This doc needs serious editorial brush-up since the policies etc. have changed since time times of RFC2472. A few things I noted: - many typos in the old text have been introduced since RFC2472 (was editing done based on pre-publishing I-D version, not the one edited by the RFC-editor). Easily findable using 'wdiff' or the like. - the abstract contains a reference, which is disallowed; - the abstract is probably too long, it should be about one paragraph of 5-10 lines or so. - there are a couple of instances of lines going beyond 72 chars - the boilerplates and in front and at the end need to be updated to RFC3668. - there appear to be (some) hyphenations at the end of lines, which shouldn't be done. - the references need to be split to informative/normative (remember that normative must not include other than BCPs and Draft Standards or there will be a problem) - some characters seem to have been substituted for something weird, like '"' for '=93' or '=94'. Again, 'wdiff' is your friend here. - nowadays the security considerations section might require a bit more beef. All in all, this smells like a quick update, text-editing the old RFC and not using proper tools such as xml2rfc. This will probably prove short-sighted. Not commenting on the technical content at this point. -- Pekka Savola "You each name yourselves king, yet the Netcore Oy kingdom bleeds." Systems. Networks. Security. -- George R.R. Martin: A Clash of Kings -------------------------------------------------------------------- IETF IPv6 working group mailing list [EMAIL PROTECTED] Administrative Requests: https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ipv6 --------------------------------------------------------------------
