Attached are gpilotd and libgpilotd manpages modified based on Brian's 
review. Please review again.

Thanks,
Jerry

Brian Cameron wrote:
>
> Jerry:
>
>> These four libs are delivered with SUNWgnome-pilot, they are missing 
>> originally. Please noete libgpilotdcm and libgpilotdconduit are 
>> shadow manpages. Please review.
>
> gpilotd(1):
>
> - I would just say "gnome-pilot daemon" rather than "gnome-pilot gpilotd
>   daemon"
> - I would remove "shipped with Gnome-Pilot package" in the DESCRIPTION
> - I'd say "that monitors" rather than "that monitor".
>
> - You say:
>
>      Gnome-pilot has an API for creating conduits as well as  a  couple
>      of default conduits, including one for backing up files, and
>      one for installing files.
>
>   I would say:
>
>      Gnome-pilot has default conduits for backing up files and
>      installing files.  It also includes an API for creating conduits.
>
> - You say:
>
>   >    for example,  the  Evolution  mail/calendar/memo PIM application
>   >    suite.
>
>   I would make this a new sentence.
>
> - I would also include the new section 3 manpages in the "SEE ALSO"
>   section.  Also there seem to already be a manpage for
>   gpilot-install-file.1.  I would mention this in SEE ALSO as well.
>
> libgpilotd(3):
>
> - I would say "C interfaces" rather than "C interface".  I would
>   also change "gnome-pilot gpilotd daemon" to just "gnome-pilot
>   daemon".
>
> - I would say "The gpilotd daemon monitors for pilot connections
>   on one or more devices." instead of the first sentence of the
>   DESCRIPTION.  Note "connections" rather than "connects".  No
>   need to mention about the package.
>
> - I would also reword the "It has an API for creating conduits"
>   sentence as I show above for gpilotd(1).
>
> - The SEE ALSO section should also mention gnome-pilot-install-file.1
>
> - Are there any API references installed to /usr/share/gtk-doc, or
>   someplace else, perhaps online?  If so, I would also mention a
>   reference to the docs in the SEE ALSO section.
>
> Brian

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