Hello, I reviewed the JWE draft and have some comments below. The draft looks good overall and my comments are mostly grammar related.
Section 3, It seems like it would be helpful to have the definitions for the two defined serializations for JWE objects broken out into subsections or at least distinguished in some way (bullets, etc). Section 3.1, references may be helpful for included for algorithms: RSAES OAEP [] for key encryption AES GCM [] for content encryption Section 5.2, for bullet number 1, Could you break the first sentence into two and structure the second of those two sentences in a manner similar to the current sentence 2? Section 5.2, bullet #4, please break into two sentences Section 11, Not sure on this, but would the use of the word 'faced' be difficult for non-native English speakers to understand? May use 'that apply to' or something similar? Section 11, In the last sentence of the first paragraph, it sounds as if no additional considerations will be included, but there are subsections that follow. Could you mention that the following subsection include some important considerations, however… I think that will help the section flow better. -- Best regards, Kathleen
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