Lars - Thanx for the review. Responses inline - though I have to say your section references are a "little bit off" - not sure why.
> -----Original Message----- > From: Lars Eggert via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> > Sent: Wednesday, May 24, 2023 11:24 PM > To: The IESG <i...@ietf.org> > Cc: draft-ietf-lsr-rfc8920...@ietf.org; lsr-cha...@ietf.org; lsr@ietf.org; > cho...@chopps.org; cho...@chopps.org > Subject: Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-lsr-rfc8920bis-04: (with > COMMENT) > > Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-lsr-rfc8920bis-04: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to > https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot- > positions/ > for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-lsr-rfc8920bis/ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > # GEN AD review of draft-ietf-lsr-rfc8920bis-03 > > CC @larseggert > > Thanks to Roni Even for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review > (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen- > art/cC3DuuZVG_NAjLDNQMr_P5B14E8). > > ## Nits > > All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may > choose to > address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by > automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there > will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you > did with these suggestions. > > ### Grammar/style > > #### Section 12.3.2, paragraph 1 > ``` > ications. It is, however, RECOMMENDED to advertise all link attributes for RS > ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ > ``` > The verb "RECOMMENDED" is used with the gerund form. > [LES:] I guess you mean Section 12.3.4. But AFAIK "recommended" is an adjective - not a verb. In any case I prefer to leave this to the RFC Editor. > #### Section 14.1, paragraph 1 > ``` > ch they MUST NOT be used. A new sub-section discussing the use of zero- > lengt > ^^^^^^^^^^^ > ``` > This word is normally spelled as one. > [LES:] I guess you mean Section 15. Noted. > #### Section 16.1, paragraph 9 > ``` > C 8920 included the following acknowledgements: Thanks to Chris Bowers for > h > ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ > ``` > Do not mix variants of the same word ("acknowledgement" and > "acknowledgment") > within a single text. > [LES:] Ack I will make the spelling corrections in the next update. Les > ## Notes > > This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use > the > [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into > individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT]. > > [ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md > [ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments > [IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool > > _______________________________________________ Lsr mailing list Lsr@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/lsr
