Rene:

It is not a gatekeeper of any sort.

I will not be able to another review for a couple of weeks.  You have asked at 
a particularly busy time for me.

Russ


> On Jul 14, 2020, at 1:45 PM, Rene Struik <[email protected]> wrote:
> 
> Hi Russ:
> 
> It has been a while that you provided your early SecDir review comments. I do 
> not know whether such early reviews are a gate keeper for sealing off the 
> lwig curve draft. Nevertheless, it may be good to know if you are reasonably 
> happy for this to move forward.
> 
> For some details on how I tried to take your comments into account, please 
> see my March 10th email below, where the mailing list link is
> https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/lwip/P8kfrso7lvcbf4bpxJjcEpDxjNU/#
> 
> For the current draft, see
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-lwig-curve-representations/
> 
> I am looking forward hearing back from you.
> 
> Best regards, Rene
> 
> On 2020-03-10 11:19 a.m., Rene Struik wrote:
>> Hi Russ:
>> 
>> I tried to take into account your comments with 
>> draft-ietf-lwig-curve-representations-09.
>> 
>> I will send out a separate email to the list highlighting main changes.
>> 
>> Below, I will explain how I tried and accommodate your previous comments on 
>> the 08-draft, now that the new draft is out.
>> 
>> Important note:
>> As you know from offline communications, I did include Curve448-related 
>> material with the 09 version. I tried to do this in a way that would create 
>> the least editorial upheaval and would not take away from the main 
>> objectives of the document: to this end, I only introduced Curve448-related 
>> material in Section 4.4 [thereby avoiding having to sprinkle in 
>> curve448-related language in each section and blurring the message of the 
>> document]. The only other sections where Curve448 plays a role is IANA 
>> Section 10 and the appendices that give the parameters and test vectors for 
>> the Curve448 family members. {Note: I probably should have added a note on 
>> ECDSA448 in the security consideration section, though (I made a note on 
>> this and will fix).}
>> 
>> 
>> Best regards, Rene
>> 
>> On 11/26/2019 5:21 PM, Rene Struik wrote:
>>> Hi Russ:
>>> 
>>> Thanks.
>>> 
>>> On 11/26/2019 4:10 PM, Russ Housley wrote:
>>>> 
>>>>> On Nov 26, 2019, at 2:54 PM, Rene Struik <[email protected]> wrote:
>>>>> 
>>>>> Dear Russ:
>>>>> 
>>>>> Thanks for your review (and speedy turn-around).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Please find below feedback on how I intend to address all but your last 
>>>>> remarks (I will reflect on your suggestion as to introductory text with 
>>>>> the appendices when looking over Daniel Migault's earlier "guidance of 
>>>>> the reader" remarks).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Best regards, Rene
>>>>> 
>>>>> On 11/26/2019 12:58 PM, Russ Housley via Datatracker wrote:
>>>>>> Reviewer: Russ Housley
>>>>>> Review result: Has Issues
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> I reviewed this document as part of the Security Directorate's ongoing
>>>>>> effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
>>>>>> comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Security Area
>>>>>> Directors.  Document authors, document editors, and WG chairs should
>>>>>> treat these comments just like any other IETF Last Call comments.
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Document: draft-ietf-lwig-curve-representations-08
>>>>>> Reviewer: Russ Housley
>>>>>> Review Date: 2019-11-26
>>>>>> IETF LC End Date: unknown
>>>>>> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Summary: Has Issues
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Major Concerns:
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> I am confused by the first paragraph in Section 10.  It says that "An
>>>>>> object identifier is requested ...", but then code points for COSE
>>>>>> and JOSE (not object identifiers) are requested in the subsection.
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> I am confused by the second paragraph in Section 10.  It says that
>>>>>> "There is *currently* no further IANA action required ...". Please
>>>>>> delete this paragraph.
>>>>> RS>> If I remember this correctly, I borrowed this from another draft 
>>>>> (but perhaps was somewhat ignorant here about proper formulation). I 
>>>>> intend to change the first para to "code points are requested for ....". 
>>>>> As to the second para, I believe it has some merit to keep this in, in 
>>>>> slightly altered form, e.g.,  as "New object identifiers would be 
>>>>> required in case one wishes to specify one or more of the "offspring" 
>>>>> protocols exemplified in Section 4.4. Specification hereof is, however, 
>>>>> outside scope of the current document."
>>>>> 
>>>>> <<RS
>>>> I do not see how the second paragraph gives any direction regarding the 
>>>> IANA registries.
>>> 
>>> RS>>  The requested algorithm registrations are for co-factor ECDH (Example 
>>> 4.1) and ECDSA (Example 4.3), where the second para is more a reminder that 
>>> one would need more registrations if one would like other spin-offs (so it 
>>> was more to keep parallelism with Example 4.4). As example, one could 
>>> instantiate e.g., Wei25519 plus, say, MQV (which NIST SP 800-56a + new 
>>> curve W25519 in draft SP 186 would enable) and, e.g., Wei25519+MQV, 
>>> Wei25519 + impl cert (for V2V; see IACR 2019-157), etc., but I did not wish 
>>> to go over the top and that could be to be defined elsewhere. From a 
>>> Spartan writing perspective, it could indeed be argued that one could guess 
>>> this oneself. <<RS
>> 
>> RS1>> Since I added Curve448-related material, I divided the IANA section 
>> into two subsections, where the first one requests for code points for 
>> Wei25519 and the second one requests for code points for Wei448. The reason 
>> for this organization is that it shows clearly the edits w.r.t. the 08 
>> version. Due to the additional request for code points for Wei448, I changed 
>> the language in the preamble of the IANA section as follows:
>> 
>> Code points are requested for curve Wei25519 and Wei448 and its use with 
>> ECDSA and co-factor ECDH, using the representation conventions of this 
>> document.
>> New code points would be required in case one wishes to specify one or more 
>> other "offspring" protocols beyond those exemplified in Section 4.4. 
>> Specification hereof is, however, outside scope of the current document.
>> 
>> <<RS1
>> 
>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>>> Minor Concerns:
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Requirements Language section is out of date.  It should reference
>>>>>> RFC 8174 in addition to RFC 2119, as follows:
>>>>>> 
>>>>>>     The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
>>>>>>     "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "NOT RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and
>>>>>>     "OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in
>>>>>>     BCP 14 [RFC2119] [RFC8174] when, and only when, they appear in all
>>>>>>     capitals, as shown here.
>>>>> RS>> will do. As minor point (from a non-native speaker's perspective): 
>>>>> shouldn't the last part of the above sentence read "if, and only if, 
>>>>> these appear...."? <<RS
>>>> RFC 8174 calls for this exact text.
>>> RS>> My remark above was more a "Strunk and White" remark. <<RS
>> RS1>> Changed, as requested. <<RS1
>>>> 
>>>>>> Section 2 says: "... reuse of existing generic code ...";  I do not know
>>>>>> what is meant by "generic".  It either needs to be defined, reworded, or
>>>>>> dropped.  I note that elsewhere in the document "existing code" is used.
>>>>> RS>> I will add a sentence to that effect, e.g., "(Here, generic code 
>>>>> refers to an implementation that does not depend on hardcoded domain 
>>>>> parameters (see also Section 6).)" <<RS
>>>> Thanks.
>>>> 
>>>>>> I expected Section 9 to say something about public keys being unique
>>>>>> identifiers of the private key holder.
>>>>> RS>> I will add an extra paragraph to this effect, e.g., "Use of a public 
>>>>> key in any protocol for which successful execution evidences knowledge of 
>>>>> the corresponding private key implicitly indicates the entity holding 
>>>>> this private key. Reuse of this public key with more than one protocol or 
>>>>> more than one protocol instantiation may, therefore, allow traceability 
>>>>> of this entity." <<RS
>>>> Also, using the same public key with different addresses allows an 
>>>> observer to correlate them.
>>> RS>> Indeed, one can correlate more stuff from meta-info that includes the 
>>> public key as a common data element (even if the observer would not be able 
>>> to check whether those are technically bound to this, this would often work 
>>> in practice). <<RS
>> 
>> RS1>>The added text now reads as follows:
>> 
>> Use of a public key in any protocol for which successful execution evidences 
>> knowledge of the corresponding private key implicitly indicates the entity 
>> holding this private key. Reuse of this public key with more than one 
>> protocol or more than one protocol instantiation may, therefore, allow 
>> traceability of this entity. It may also allow correlation of meta-data 
>> communicated with this common data element (e.g., different addressing 
>> information), even if an observer cannot technically verify the binding of 
>> this meta-data.
>> 
>> <<RS1
>> 
>>>> 
>>>>>> Some introduction text at the beginning of each Appendix would be very
>>>>>> helpful.  Please tell the reader what they will learn by delving into
>>>>>> the subsections of the appendix.
>>>>> RS>> I will reflect on this somewhat more (while also considering 
>>>>> "guidance to the reader" remarks in Daniel Migault's Early IoTDir 
>>>>> review).  Broadly speaking, though, inclusion of all these appendices 
>>>>> makes the entire docment self-contained, including arithmetic, 
>>>>> representations, how-to-convert details, etc. <<RS
>>>> Yes, I understand that.  Some of the appendicies have introductory text, 
>>>> but other do not.  I think they all should have introductory text.
>> 
>> RS1>> I added some introductory text to each appendix.
>> 
>> <<RS1
>> 
>>>> 
>>>>>> Nits:
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Section 4.2 says: "... at the end of hereof ...".  This does not tell
>>>>>> me anything useful.  I suggest deleting this phrase.
>>>>> RS>> I will change this to "at the end hereof" (i.e., will remove "of" - 
>>>>> a glitch). Here, one can only recover the y-coordinate at the end of the 
>>>>> Montgomery ladder, since one needs the x-coordinates of k*G and (k+1)*G 
>>>>> to make this work. <<RS
>>>> I think it would be better to say: ... at the end of the Montgomery ladder 
>>>> ..."
>> RS1>> Changed as suggested. <<RS1
>>>> 
>>>> Russ
>>>> 
>>> 
>> 
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