Hey all, just a few things: Page 5 in ..."binary that not only to benefits application developers" remove the 'to' after "..source code and binary
Page 7, -third paragraph ".. While the philosophy to keep things simply remains," change "simply" to "simple" -fifth paragraph ..."to be official part of GNOME": add 'an' before 'official part of GNOME', also drop the -on- in ..."next release and -on- specific modules. Page 10, -Boston Summit, 2nd paragraph: .."Gtk+?/WebKit, Clutter 2.0, and Gestures among others." - I'm sure I meant to determine which vs of Gtk+ was worked, on, I'd assume 3 at this point, though I'm not 100% on that. (2010) - , add a comma after Evolution ..."Evolution Gstreamer, packaging GNOME in Debian and many others." Page 12, - change 'server' to 'served': "The conference server as warm up for the hackfest" and add "a" after "served as" so its "served as a warm up", - remo 'to' : "GNOME documentation team to engage with other fellows." ..'team engage with other fellows' Under 'Accessibility hackfest agenda' - add "The" and change 'Plans' to plan before the first line: "The Plans for GNOME 3.." Page 15 - need a space between 2011 and the: "In 2011the GNOME's outreach" - change "runs" to "ran": "runs through March 15, 2012" - remove ? before 'LinkedIn': "manager on ?LinkedIn" Page 18: can we move the link (http://openhatch.org/wiki/Open_Source_Workshop) down to the bottom? Or put a [1] in and then the link either after the question is fully answered or at the end of the interview (moving any/all others as well). Page 20: link: "mentoring howto: http://people.gnome.org/~federico/docs/summerofcodementoringhowto/"; Page 21: 2 links : .."available at http://youtu.be/jHBN_rOZA* The 7th GNOME Forum" and end of 3rd paragraph Otherwise it looks great!! Thanks for all the hardwork!! Emily On Thu, Jul 19, 2012 at 10:30 PM, Diego Escalante Urrelo <[email protected]> wrote: > Commenting is easy so here I go: > > - Isn't Karen's signature a bit "dirty"? > > - On the cover, isn't Annual Report a bit missaligned? Or is it just a > printing consideration? Also, the all caps looks a bit "Arialish" > > - Why not serif fonts for the main text too? Like in page 8 for > quotes, I believe this is usually easier to read on big text blocks. > (sorry, this is by far the naggiest comment) > > - On page 11/12 for Hackfests, the photo that is going to be cut in > the middle... Literally cuts down the girl in the middle. Any chance > to use another (the one with the laptops perhaps, since the middle is > empty, although it looks cool on the left already)? > > - On page 19, the interview with Daniel has some weird spacing, I mean > that there is a lot of blank before the title. I fail to see the > reason, I suppose it is some aligment reason. > > Now that you hate me, I will go on and say that it looks really cool > :-). Pages are well built, photos well used and the simplicity is > really GNOMEish. > > Thank you for all the work, you are my hero <3 > > On Thu, Jul 19, 2012 at 8:56 PM, Andreas Nilsson <[email protected]> wrote: >> Hi! >> Designed and ready, now ready for proof reading before we print it. >> http://andreasn.myownb3.com/temp/annual-report.pdf >> - Andreas >> -- >> marketing-list mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing-list > -- > marketing-list mailing list > [email protected] > https://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing-list -- Whatever you can do, or dream you can, begin it. Boldness has genius, power and magic in it. - Goethe Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind. - Dr.Seuss Not everything that can be counted counts, and not everything that counts can be counted. - Albert Einstein -- marketing-list mailing list [email protected] https://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing-list
