Hi Looks great. Good enough as it is.
In the 1st paragraph i prefer using camel-case when talking about OpenSource (rather than open source) as quite a few other places do it that way. For the 2nd paragraph i the tweaks i would suggest (for English (GB)) "While Piwik does use a cookie to distinguish between individual visitors, the collected data doesn't identify individuals. The collected data will only be used to improve the website - it won't be matched with individual's data from other sources and we won't share the collected data with third parties. We will only use collective data amalgamated from the results provided by Piwik for our evaluation." Mostly just pedantic points covering minor adjustments. I assume that the data from a number of individuals might be added together and then compared against sums done by other websites which is why i added an extra "individual's" in the middle there. I tried to cut the legalese type part in the middle down to plain English while keeping the meaning of it. Then i went the other way with the last line because "amalgized" is not a real word although it is obvious what it means. So, pedantic points that could easily be ignored. Errr, i assume this means that i could use this for other sites that are looking for statistics about usage? Many regards from Tom :) ________________________________ From: Christian Lohmaier <[email protected]> To: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] Sent: Tue, 21 December, 2010 16:33:56 Subject: [libreoffice-marketing] Re: Piwik statistics → Privacy Policy needs an update Hi *, as the request did only result in <silence>, here's my proposal: (cc german list, as it also contains german text) On Thu, Dec 16, 2010 at 10:05 PM, Christian Lohmaier <[email protected]> wrote: > > piwik (web analytics tool - details here http://piwik.org/) will be > used for the website(s) the TDF runs to get some usage statistics. > Thus the privacy policy needs some love regarding this topic. This is meant to replace the "Use of Cookies" section: ####### Use of Piwik On our website, we use the open source web analysis software Piwik. Data collected by Piwik includes IP, time and duration of the visit, what pages are visited, used browser and plugins, search-engines and referrer. While Piwik uses a cookie to distinguish between individual visitors, the collected data doesn't allow to identify individuals. The collected data will only be used to improve the website - especially that data won't be matched with data from other sources, and we won't share the collected data with third parties. We'll only use anoymized, collective analysis provided by Piwik for our evaluation. ####### Einsatz von Piwik Wir verwenden auf unseren Webseiten die Open Source Webanalyse-Software Piwik ein. Daten, die durch Piwik erhoben werden sind die IP, der Zeitpunkt und Dauer des Besuchs, die besuchten Webseiten, verwendeter Browser und Plugins, Suchmaschinen und Referrer. Piwik verwendet einen Cookie um einzelne Benutzer zu unterscheiden, die erhobenen Daten können aber nicht dazu herangezogen werden eine bestimmte Person zu identifizieren. Die Daten werden ausschließlich zur Verbesserung des Webangebots herangezogen - insbesondere werden die Daten nicht mit Daten aus anderen Quellen abgeglichen und die Daten werden nicht an Dritte weitergegeben. Lediglich anonymisierte, kollektive Analysen der Daten werden für die Auswertung verwendet. ####### so comment and suggest better wordings please :-) ciao Christian -- Unsubscribe instructions: E-mail to [email protected] List archive: http://www.libreoffice.org/lists/marketing/ *** All posts to this list are publicly archived for eternity *** -- Unsubscribe instructions: E-mail to [email protected] List archive: http://www.libreoffice.org/lists/marketing/ *** All posts to this list are publicly archived for eternity ***
