Hi guys! I'm from Allegheny too, but I figured I could help here anyway... especially as someone who understands close to nothing about Fedora.
I read the press release and I think it is good! My suggestions: - It might be good to provide a brief description of Linux. I have no idea how to define Linux and I have a feeling there are some other people who don't know either. -I think you could go into a bit more detail about describing what exactly Fedora is, in the opening paragraph. -In the desktop user section, I don't understand why the printer example is used. Is it just an example of the sorts of things Fedora can do? -I like the Spin section! It makes sense! - In Help make Fedora! - be a bit more encouraging - a lot of Fedora is not just getting people excited about using Fedora, but getting people excited about being involved in the Fedora community, right? I hope this helps. If you want to talk in real life, that would be fine. I would not be opposed to joining your team, if you are in need of another team member. Again, good job Adrienne On Thu, Apr 15, 2010 at 7:21 PM, Tyler Torbet <[email protected]> wrote: > Tonight, Dan, Ashley, Sarah, Mel and I worked with our first draft of the > release notes. We reworded many of the sections and added several new > points. As you can tell, this is still a work in progress so any comments > or edits are welcome! > > Here is the wiki page after working on it tonight: > https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/F13_one_page_release_notes#Draft_starts_here > > Tyler > > -- > marketing mailing list > [email protected] > https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing >
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