captions looks good :) On Mon, Jun 15, 2015 at 10:44 AM, Ryan Lerch <[email protected]> wrote:
> Hi Sumit! > > First up, thanks for submitting your first post to the Fedora Magazine. I > have done a quick review of your post, and here are a few ideas / > suggestions from me. (other editors, feel free to pitch in ideas too) > > First up, i'd probably be a bit more direct and informative with the > title, instead of "Fedora 22 Intel Graphics Woes : Here's some help" > maybe something like "Solution for graphics issues on some Intel graphics > chipsets in Fedora 22" (just a suggestion, feel free to change and or edit > too :) ) > > Secondly, i'd probably remove the majority of the first paragraph and lead > with the issue itself (your third paragraph) -- most people get to the > magazine via third party links, so starting with the info they came for > always works well. I'm thinking something like: > """ > Fedora 22 was [link to release annonce on fedora mag]released > recently[/link], and if you are using a Pre-Sandybridge era Intel-based > graphics chipset (For example, Intel 4 series motherboards with G41 chipset > and GMA X4500 graphics), chances are that you might be facing graphics > issues like shown in below screenshot on Fedora 22. > [screenshot] > """ > > Then after the screenshot, have your brief description of the problem, > covering the points that fedora switched to a new accel method that doesnt > work so well with older chipsets. > > Then put the solution. I found the bug for this issue ( > https://bugzilla.redhat.com/show_bug.cgi?id=1226743) which might be worth > mentioning. And there updated kernels (kernel-4.0.5-300.fc22 and > kernel-4.0.5-200.fc21) that fix this issue is already in updates-testing, > so it is probably a better solution to recommend that people install the > new package with the fix from updates testing, or wait for the package to > hit the proper repos (rather than editing a config file that they may > forget about and cause them issues in the future.) > > cheers, > ryanlerch > > > > > > > > > > <[email protected]> > > -- > marketing mailing list > [email protected] > List info or to change your subscription: > https://admin.fedoraproject.org/mailman/listinfo/marketing >
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