On 6 June 2016 at 12:33, Sumantro Mukherjee <[email protected]> wrote:

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> ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Ryan Lerch" <[email protected]>
> > To: "Fedora Marketing team" <[email protected]>
> > Sent: Monday, June 6, 2016 4:35:10 PM
> > Subject: [Marketing] Release Validation Testing article
> >
> > HI all,
> >
> > I have finished editing the release validation testing article.
> >
> > I edited it down a fair bit to try to provide a better hook for users
> that
> > might want to get involved with Fedora by helping out with relvar
> testing.
> >
> > If anyone else could also throw a quick eye over it from this
> perspective,
> > that would be useful. otherwise, if the original author is happy with the
> > edits, this should be ready to go out!
> >
> > also added a featured image!
> >
> > cheers,
> > ryanlerch
> >
> Hey Ryan
> I went through and it look very good!
>
> Overall looks good - but the opening sentence felt a little hard to parse
"If you are looking for a way to get involved in helping to make Fedora,
 completing some test cases for Release Validation Testing  is a quick way
to get started helping Fedora."

The multiple helping fedora bit read a little awkwardly I thought   ...
s/to get started helping Fedora/to begin contributing/ ?
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