Wow!
That was quite some story to be sending off for your first MK
submittal. I'm very impressed.
The story did feel like it was dragging at times when the dragon was
just acting insane. You could probably trim some of that down and
still not lose any of the effectiveness of his nuttiness.
The dilemmas that Zyn faced were real and while I did not like all of
his choices (especially his final choice with Lum) he approached them
consistently and finally with some bravery. It'll be interesting to
see where he ends up.
Good luck with your future efforts!
May He bless you and keep you in His grace and love,
Charles Matthias
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