If you could Krimel, please add another line in your verse. The rhythm of this poem is 3 line verse then 2 line verse, thus, 3-2-3-2... It would help to retain the integrity of this renga. Anyways, since the one before what you wrote was a two liner, then its' a great honor for you, I would say, to have the opportunity to express even more on this three line turn in which you took.
thanks. It would be much appreciated. SA --- On Wed, 8/13/08, Krimel <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > From: Krimel <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > Subject: Re: [MD] poetry > To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] > Date: Wednesday, August 13, 2008, 10:13 AM > -----Original Message----- > From: Heather Perella > [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: Wednesday, August 13, 2008 1:52 PM > To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] > Subject: Re: [MD] poetry > > The bright moon, > the wind moves leaves - > geese not seen. > > Flight across the pond, well met > A being bigger than names > > raindrops on the roof > dead leaf oceans scattering > who knocks at the door? > > Weeping willow, strong old oak, > fire dancing from ancient skies. > > Fresh sweet cool air > Solid comfort > Deep stillness within the rush > > Here..., It..., Is..., desiring, > galaxies, and swollen breasts. > > the wind stirs > sick, achy, resting > quiet sun shines > > Change flowers in the wanting > Petals inform beauty, grace > > In milky way embrace > Lustful Impassioned ethereal whisps > Of angels breath in starry skies > > Nothing, her darkness shining, > words unwritten, waves unseen. > > Her hair hung lovely as > the autumns dusk, > Her eyes dark almonds > > ...by a neurosurgical stroke so fine > I find myself completely out of my mind.. > > clouds and blue, > earth dripping cold water > - Get over it now! > > Laughing, calling, babbling, > this river flows well. > > unseen beneath trees > flowing ocean > of Glowing tune of autumn > > dreaming of approval, approval, approval > the starving child who never sleeps > > on my PC, > hours pass like minutes pass like seconds on my > PC. my childs weeping in his sleep > > Leaf drops overhead > - I move out of the way. > > Into a future without flow, > under a sky no longer blue, > but with its calling no less true. > > I wrote for you then, like Cyrano, > Words I would never speak. > > the autumn leaves pile by the door > I almost hear the rustle of her dress > how can I bring my aching heart to rest > > Skin is green, wart on her nose, > bitchy as hell, has webbed toes. > > one gray squirrel now five, > stomach fur, snow lays, teeth push, > - more white by the moment! > > a preview of things to come, > as the dog takes in the heat. > > Cold night, cold light, > thoughts falling from the trees. > Wind chimes, rabbit rhythms, dancing sea. > > reborn now, chimeric, chameleonic > a goddess, she thought was she > > Poetic stereotypes, often called tropes, > Include things like women, graphic pain, > and darkness. > > On the edge of a long fall, > breathing you, memory and dream. > > Creativities code... > Art must do! > What art does! > > in this quietness > - what ya doin'! > > island of senses, She sighs, > Isness shines and sings, > slowly to See. Ecstasy... > > Is your world stale? > Colors, poems - beautify!!!! > > When I die, let it be > calling for Her. > Ma, Mother of all names. > > Small hand searching for treasure. > Placing it on your heart. There! > > Giggle the time scale and rocks roll. > Mountains, crumble and erode > The fractal forms of valleys flow > > All things cleave and shatter > Zoom in, Zoom out, refocus. > > Night smoke smelled > Chimney's burning long > - snow is icy. > > Spring winds in the trees now, > Cold then warm then... > > A germ on the pincer of mite > On the leg of an ant on the back of an elephant > Climbs a mountain like a pimple on the planet > > When things cleave they only matter > If you zoom in, zoom out and refocus. > > hocus-pocus, distorted locus > only has meaning > when out of focus > > the dream is now lived - a niche! > I can now express this way. > > Focused is as focused does > When contemplating navel fuzz Moq_Discuss mailing list Listinfo, Unsubscribing etc. http://lists.moqtalk.org/listinfo.cgi/moq_discuss-moqtalk.org Archives: http://lists.moqtalk.org/pipermail/moq_discuss-moqtalk.org/ http://moq.org.uk/pipermail/moq_discuss_archive/
