Joy, I really I thought I answered this online but maybe I sent off an email privately.... anyway... the stretch part of Carl Anderson's work (which I adapted) was taken from a workshop he did with my first graders as part of our satellite program with TC. Carl merely said the following in one of the quickest yet most effective minilessons I've ever watched....."there are three ways a writer can tell more about something." They can either: 1. tell what they were thinking about or 2. tell what they said at the time or 3. they can tell the very next action they did. for example: if the detail was ....My dog ran away. Three ways you could expand on that sentence are: I thought I never would see Mudge again. or you could write... "Mudge," I screamed hysterically, "where are you? " or you could write "Panicking, I looked under the bed, in the closet, and around the basement... but Mudge was no where to be found. The way I got my first graders to use this information was to scroll their story out as a plan: first page- lead and then a stretch for that lead (using one of the above methods) second page-the beginning event of the story and then a stretch for that event. third page- middle event and then a stretch for that event fourth page-"outside ending" event and then a stretch for that event fifth page- an "inside ending" and then a "show not tell" for that inside ending This kind of structured writing is taken from Lucy Calkins' units on small moments (writing across your hands), Carl's ideas from our workshop, and David Middlebrooks' plan of textmapping.... in other words: story structure happens at a particular place in each genre....we examined many small moments and we noticed that the page setup was much like what was described above. Hope this helps Pam PS to the reader who posted the badabing sentence... I tried this out with first graders for a memory page we were making and it worked like a charm to pull the most important information into one sentence creatively. For those who don't know the badabing it goes like this: ba (tell what your feet did) da (tell what your eyes saw) bing tell what you thought..... a first grader's memory page about our multicultural dance went like this: As sweat swirled down my face as I pounded my feet on the stage, my mom's eyes locked on to mine. I wondered if the crowd would roar an applause. (fluent writer) another version (early writer) ... My kimono waved on my legs as I watched my fan twirl. I worried that my tummy felt too tight.
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