General • Inconsistent capitalisation of “module”? Abstract • s/analysis the/analysis of the
1. Introduction • The first paragraph is a little confusing. Should the first reference to YANG replace “and YANG standards” further on? • s/community gain/community gains • s/a type of module that have/a type of module that has • But, would it be better to have “A number of module types have created substantial discussion during the development of this document including those concerned with topologies.” Instead of “An example of a type of module that have created substantial discussion during the development of this document is topologies.”? • s/as well as in/as well as on • Figure 1 seems to take a long time appearing 2. First Dimension: YANG Data Model Abstraction Layers • s/YANG modules For/YANG modules. For • Given the third paragraph, should this be “First Dimension: YANG Data Model Abstraction Layers” or “First Dimension: YANG Module Abstraction Layers”? 2.1. Network Service YANG Modules • s/define services models/define service models 3. Second Dimension: Module Types • The first paragraph uses either/and (should be either/or) for more than two alternatives. It would be better to have a bulleted list. 3.1. Standard YANG Modules • If the IEEE acronym is expanded, shouldn’t MEF also be expanded? 3.2. Vendor-specific YANG Modules and Extensions • s/contributed back to, or adopted by an SDO/contributed back to, or adopted by, an SDO • “lifecycles ... are” or “lifecycle ... is”. I suggest the former • s/than what is covered/than that covered 3.3. User-specific YANG Modules and Extensions • “operators service providers” – should that be “operators’ service providers”? • s/what is provided/that provided • s/include ability/include the ability • “lifecycles ... are” or “lifecycle ... is”. I suggest the former 4. Adding The Classification Type to YANG Module Catalogs • s/Such catalog/Such a catalog • s/to YANG module/to the YANG module • s/A extensible/An extensible • “definite” or “definitive”? 5. Security Considerations • Remove the closing double quote 8. Change log [RFC Editor: Please remove] • s/epxlain/explain Jonathan From: Benoit Claise Sent: 27 June 2016 11:40 To: NETMOD Working Group Cc: [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: [netmod] draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification-02.txt posted Dear all, We have posted draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification version 2 https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification/ We believe that we have addressed all the open issues, and that this draft is ready for WGLC. Regards, Carl, Dean, and Benoit _______________________________________________ netmod mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/netmod
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