Christer, thanks for your review. Linda, thanks for your response. I have entered a No Objection ballot.
Alissa > On Oct 4, 2017, at 2:45 PM, Christer Holmberg > <[email protected]> wrote: > > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-mcast-framework-09 > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > Review Date: 2017-10-04 > IETF LC End Date: 2017-10-02 > IESG Telechat date: 2017-10-12 > > Summary: The document is almost ready for publication, but there are a few > issues that I'd like the authors to address. > > Major issues: N/A > > Minor issues: > > Q1: > The Introduction says that the document "provides a framework". I guess it > depends on how you define "framework", but to me it seems like the document > only evaluates and discusses different mechanisms - which the text also says. > > Nits/editorial comments: > > Q2: > The Abstract says: "This document discusses a framework of supporting..." > > Assuming the document actually does provide a framework (see Q1), I would > suggest to say "provides" (which you also use in the Introduction) instead of > "discusses". > > Q3: > The Introduction says: "Network virtualization using Overlays over Layer 3 > (NVO3) is a Technology... " > > Please add a reference to RFC 7365 and/or RFC 8014 on the first occurrence of > NVO3. > > Q4: > I don't think the last paragraph of the Introdution (Section 1) belongs to the > Introduction. It should be in a terminology section. In addition, I don't > think > you need to say that "the user is assumed to be familiar with...". You should > simply reference the RFCs for the terminology used in the document. > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ nvo3 mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/nvo3
