Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-opsawg-vmm-mib-03: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-vmm-mib/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- I mean the following as a question, because it's something I've never thought about, but seems odd: Is it normal to have 2119 language in the description fields in a MIB definition? Who is that language intended for? -- 6.1, vm-mib "description" field: Do you expect the sentence about 'yyy' being temporary to be removed by the RFC Editor? If so, you probably want a note to that effect. -- VirtualMachineList description: "... set of eight virtual machine vmIndex..." Should vmIndex be plural? -- 8, 1st paragraph: "noticeable number of notifications" Is "noticeable" the word you intended? It seems like any number of notifications might be noticeable--that's the point of notifications. Also, this sentence seems out of place (the next sentence seams to draw a conclusion from the sentence prior to this one.) "... It is recommended that attention be given to these objects ... I'm not sure what it means to give attention to the objects. Identifying who or what needs to give attention might help. (consider active voice) -- paragraph 5: "It is recommended that the implementers consider the security features as provided by the SNMPv3 framework." Do you mean "use the ... features" or "consider using the ... features"? _______________________________________________ OPSAWG mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg
