I read through the draft and found a couple of minor items that might
help with readability. Please excuse me if this has been covered
already. I searched the archives but didn't find these specific things.
1. Introduction/Status of this Memo
The introduction repeats much of the text from Status of this Memo. It
also includes text saying the document expires on December 10, 2015 (the
old expiration date from -00). You can probably remove all of that.
2. ''The Draft'' is mentioned before being defined
Technically it's never really defined, but [TheDraft] is a reference and
I know what was intended. It would be nice if it was treated as a link
by the HTMLifier like the RFC/BCP statements. It might be converted if
the reference is put beside each use, I'm not familiar with the way the
HTML thing works.
It might also be nice just to include a blurb before the first mention,
or rewrite the paragraph to define it.
"A wide range of TACACS+ clients and servers are already deployed in the
field, based upon a draft RFC from 1997 [TheDraft], hereafter referred
to as ''The Draft''."
Finally, I want to say that I really appreciate you guys working on
this. TACACS+ has security and convenience issues that I've lived with
all my network life. I would very much like to see this adopted.
Also, I'm not sure if this is a fault of it being a draft or if it's
easy to fix, but the email address listed in
tools.ietf.org/html/draft-dahm-opsawg-tacacs-01
([email protected]) bounces.
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