Hi Dhruv, 

Thank you for the comments. 

Please see inline. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : OPSAWG [mailto:[email protected]] De la part de Dhruv Dhody
> Envoyé : mercredi 26 août 2020 16:48
> À : Joe Clarke (jclarke) <[email protected]>
> Cc : opsawg <[email protected]>
> Objet : Re: [OPSAWG] CALL FOR ADOPTION: draft-bgbw-opsawg-vpn-common
> 
> Hi WG,
> 
> I support adoption. Just a few thoughts...
> 
> - This document has "Updates: 8782" in its header. Surely a mistake!

[Med] Yeah. Fixed now in draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-00. 

> - This text
> 
>    To avoid the issues discussed above, this document defines a common
>    YANG module that is meant to be reused by various VPN-related
> modules
>    such as Layer 3 VPN Service Model (L3SM) [RFC8299], Layer 2 VPN
>    Service Model (L2SM) [RFC8466], Layer 3 VPN Network Model (L3NM)
>    [I-D.ietf-opsawg-l3sm-l3nm], and Layer 2 VPN Network Model (L2NM)
>    [I-D.ietf-opsawg-l2nm]: "ietf-vpn-common" (Section 4).
> 
> While it is clear how this common model can be used by work-in-
> progress L3NM and L2NM models, I am not sure about the published
> service model. Maybe you want to suggest that a future update of these
> service models MAY use this common model? If yes, better to be
> explicit.
> 

[Med] What about: 

OLD:
   To avoid the issues discussed above, this document defines a common
   YANG module that is meant to be reused by various VPN-related modules
   such as Layer 3 VPN Service Model (L3SM) [RFC8299], Layer 2 VPN
   Service Model (L2SM) [RFC8466], Layer 3 VPN Network Model (L3NM)
   [I-D.ietf-opsawg-l3sm-l3nm], and Layer 2 VPN Network Model (L2NM)
   [I-D.ietf-opsawg-l2nm]: "ietf-vpn-common" (Section 4).

   The "ietf-vpn-common" module includes a set of identities, types, and
   groupings that are meant to be reused by other VPN-related YANG
   modules independently of their layer (e.g., Layer 2, Layer 3) and the
   type of the module (e.g., network model, service model) including
   future revisions of existing models (e.g., L3SM [RFC8299] or L3SM
   [RFC8466]).

NEW:
   To avoid the issues discussed above, this document defines a common
   YANG module that is meant to be reused by various VPN-related modules
   such as Layer 3 VPN Network Model (L3NM) [I-D.ietf-opsawg-l3sm-l3nm] 
   and Layer 2 VPN Network Model (L2NM)[I-D.ietf-opsawg-l2nm]: 
   "ietf-vpn-common" (Section 4).

   The "ietf-vpn-common" module includes a set of identities, types, and
   groupings that are meant to be reused by other VPN-related YANG
   modules independently of their layer (e.g., Layer 2, Layer 3) and the
   type of the module (e.g., network model, service model) including
   future revisions of existing models (e.g., Layer 3 VPN Service Model 
   (L3SM) [RFC8299] or Layer 2 VPN Service Model (L2SM) [RFC8466]).

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