Hi Kenneth, Thank you for the 01 draft. Here are a few review items.
Item 1: The Description clause for the SnmpTLSFingerprint TEXTUAL-CONVENTION has the word obsolete in quotes i.e., "obsolete" in line 185. It is suggested that the quotes around the word obsolete be removed as it can be confusing to some compiler programs as to where the Description clause ends. Item 2: The size restriction for SnmpTLSFingerprint in line 564 needs to be removed because it is already defined in the Textual Convention. snmpTlstmCertToTSNFingerprint OBJECT-TYPE SYNTAX SnmpTLSFingerprint (SIZE(1..255)) <== Item 3: In section 2.2 shown below, perhaps the implementation to use authPriv should be strongly recommended instead of forced. >> 2.2. Security Level >> The RFC3411 architecture recognizes three levels of security: >> * without authentication and without privacy (noAuthNoPriv) >> * with authentication but without privacy (authNoPriv) >> * with authentication and with privacy (authPriv) >> With (D)TLS 1.3, authentication and privacy are always provided. >> Hence, all exchanges conforming to the rules of this document will >> include authentication and privacy, regardless of the security level >> requested. >> // This is consistent with what was prescribed in RFC6353, where a >> // TLS Transport Model is expected to provide for outgoing >> // connections with a security level at least that of the requested >> // security level. Regards, Andy > On 03/06/2022 8:14 AM Kenneth Vaughn <[email protected]> wrote: > > > This draft responds to the various comments received to date. The big > changes are as follows: > 1. It proposes the creation of a new registry, which will initially be > identical to the TLS 1.2 Hashing Algorithm Identifier Table but will be > separate so that we can add new rows as needed to support future algorithms > without implying that those algorithms are valid for TLS 1.2. This required a > corresponding edit to the SnmpTLSFingerprint object to reference the new > table. > > 2. It removes the previously proposed restrictions related to USM, prior > SNMP versions, and CommonName. The text from RFC 6353 still apply. > > 3. Several changes were made to reflect proper capitalization of key > words in conformance to BCP14 and I changed a couple of "MAY NOT"s (which are > ambiguous) to "MUST NOT". > > NOTE: One comment that I could not address is whether OPSAWG should also > be updating RFC 7407 for YANG > > > > Specific response to comments are provided below: > Is this an update or a replacement? > Assuming the reference to a new identifier table is allowed, it is a > minor update > Has the original author been contacted? > He was previously; I've included him on this email as well. > Remove anchors from the abstract > Done > Should this document be specific to 1.3? > The current approach is 100% backwards compatible with RFC 6353 so works > with 1.2 and 1.3. It is impossible to know what changes will be made in the > future, but the changes that have been made should make it more likely to > work with future versions of TLS > RFC 6353 has already been updated by 8996 (i.e., prohibiting prior TLS > versions) > Added a reference to RFC8996 > We should not change the status of USM > Text removed > Verify all key words are marked > All key words have been capitalized and within the body of the document > (i.e., not the MIB) they are marked with <bcp14> tags > Need to discuss multi-version > No need to as there is no real change to the MIB (just referencing a > different table, but all of the objects stay the same) > Concerns about designating new objects with "13" > With adopted approach, there are no longer any new objects > Missing closing quote on CONTACT INFO > Corrected and checked MIB text with a validator > Update "Simplified BSD" to "Revised BSD" > Done > Detail changes in the MIB's revision clause > Done > > > I also corrected a couple of spelling errors > > Regards, > Ken Vaughn > > Trevilon LLC > 6606 FM 1488 RD #148-503 > Magnolia, TX 77354 > +1-936-647-1910 > +1-571-331-5670 cell > [email protected] mailto:[email protected] > http://www.trevilon.com > > > > > > On Mar 5, 2022, at 7:28 PM, [email protected] > mailto:[email protected] wrote: > > > > > > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts > > directories. > > This draft is a work item of the Operations and Management Area > > Working Group WG of the IETF. > > > > Title : Transport Layer Security Version 1.3 (TLS > > 1.3) Transport Model for the Simple Network Management Protocol Version 3 > > (SNMPv3) > > Author : Kenneth Vaughn > > Filename : draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-01.txt > > Pages : 33 > > Date : 2022-03-05 > > > > Abstract: > > This document updates the TLS Transport Model (TLSTM), as defined > > in > > RFC 6353 to support Transport Layer Security Version 1.3 (TLS) and > > Datagram Transport Layer Security Version 1.3 (DTLS), which are > > jointly known as "(D)TLS". This document may be applicable to > > future > > versions of SNMP and (D)TLS. > > > > This document updates the SNMP-TLS-TM-MIB as defined in RFC 6353. > > > > > > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update/ > > > > There is also an HTML version available at: > > > > https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-01.html > > > > A diff from the previous version is available at: > > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-opsawg-tlstm-update-01 > > > > > > Internet-Drafts are also available by rsync at > > rsync.ietf.org::internet-drafts > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > OPSAWG mailing list > > [email protected] > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > OPSAWG mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg >
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