Hi Lars, Thanks for the review.
Will fix the nits when appropriate. Cheers, Med > -----Message d'origine----- > De : Lars Eggert via Datatracker <[email protected]> > Envoyé : lundi 30 mai 2022 12:11 > À : The IESG <[email protected]> > Cc : [email protected]; [email protected]; > [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] > Objet : Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-17: > (with COMMENT) > > Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-17: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to > all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to > cut this introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to > https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot- > positions/ > for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT > positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found > here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm/ > > > > ------------------------------------------------------------------ > ---- > COMMENT: > ------------------------------------------------------------------ > ---- > > # GEN AD review of draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-17 > > CC @larseggert > > Thanks to Dale Worley for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > review > (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen- > art/iTZYyhVQ7nygCX_KIedl1RhPBE4). > > ## Nits > > All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you > may choose to > address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were > flagged by > automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf- > reviewtool), so there > will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me > know what you > did with these suggestions. > > ### Outdated references > > Reference `[RFC5143]` to `RFC5143`, which was obsoleted by > `RFC4842` (this may > be on purpose). > > ### Grammar/style > > #### Section 4, paragraph 9 > ``` > ider does not assume, nor does it precludes exposing the VPN > service via the > ^^^^^^^^^ > ``` > Did you mean "preclude"? As "do" is already inflected, the verb > cannot also be > inflected. > > #### Section 8.4, paragraph 54 > ``` > MAC address' situation has occurred and the duplicate MAC address > has been > ^^^^ > ``` > Use a comma before "and" if it connects two independent clauses > (unless they > are closely connected and short). > > ## Notes > > This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You > can use the > [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review > into > individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf- > reviewtool`][IRT]. > > [ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md > [ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments > [IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool > > _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, exploites ou copies sans autorisation. Si vous avez recu ce message par erreur, veuillez le signaler a l'expediteur et le detruire ainsi que les pieces jointes. Les messages electroniques etant susceptibles d'alteration, Orange decline toute responsabilite si ce message a ete altere, deforme ou falsifie. Merci. This message and its attachments may contain confidential or privileged information that may be protected by law; they should not be distributed, used or copied without authorisation. If you have received this email in error, please notify the sender and delete this message and its attachments. As emails may be altered, Orange is not liable for messages that have been modified, changed or falsified. Thank you. _______________________________________________ OPSAWG mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg
