Med,

0. "This document obsoletes RFC 7125."

-> It would have been good to ask the authors of that document to review 
the new draft.



1.  Introduction

       "The bits in offsets 0 through 3 are not header flags, but the TCP
       segment Data Offset field."

-> This paragraph appears out of context, and it doesn't need to be 
indented.



    "and, therefore, [RFC7125] risks to deviate from the authoritative TCP
    registry [TCP-FLAGS]."

-> s/to deviate/deviating/



3.  The tcpControlBits Information Element

It's not immediately clear whether this section is showing the current 
definition or proposing a new definition.

A title of "Updated / Proposed / Revised tcpControlBits Information 
Element" would be quite clear.



       "by the collector.  Use the tcpHeaderLength Information Element to
       encode this value."

-> s/collector/Collector/

I appreciate this language is copied from the existing definition, but 
"Collector" is a defined IPFIX term and this is the only IE in the 
registry which uses lowercase.



5.  Security Considerations

"This document uses a stronger requirement language compared to [RFC7125]."

-> s/requirement/requirements/



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