Hi Yingzhen, 

Thank you for the review. 

The changes to address your review can be seen at: 
https://github.com/boucadair/ipfix-tcpoptions-and-v6eh/commit/ee2f459370d67df88866600438f315d55a0942b9

Please see inline for more context.

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Yingzhen Qu via Datatracker <[email protected]>
> Envoyé : vendredi 5 janvier 2024 00:31
> À : [email protected]
> Cc : [email protected];
> [email protected]
> Objet : Opsdir early review of draft-ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh-
> 05
> 
> Reviewer: Yingzhen Qu
> Review result: Has Nits
> 
> I have reviewed this document as part of the Ops area
> directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being
> processed by the IESG.  These comments were written primarily for
> the benefit of the Ops area directors.
> Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
> like any other last-call comments.
> 
> This document is well written and I believe it is ready for
> publication.
> However I have a few comments on the latest version v-05.
> 
> 
> The line numbers are generated using idnits.
> 
> 93       This document specifies new IP Flow Information Export
> (IPFIX)
> 94       Information Elements (IEs) to solve a set of issues
> encountered with
> 
> nits: reference to RFC7011 and RFC7012 should be added.

[Med] OK to cite 7011 here. 

> 
> 170      The definition of the ipv6ExtensionHeaders IE is updated
> in
> 171      [I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-fixes] to address some of the
> issues listed in
> 172      Section 1.1.  Because some of these limitations can't be
> addressed by
> 173      simple updates to ipv6ExtensionHeaders, this section
> specifies a set
> 174      of new IEs to address all the ipv6ExtensionHeaders IE
> limitations.
> 
> Question: I'm confused here. Do the new IEs proposed in this
> document address all the issues? If so, why are the updates to
> ipv6ExtensionHeaders needed? Some clarifications will be helpful.
> 

[Med] The new IEs fix all the issues. We do already have the following in 
I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-fixes to zoom into this:

==
Section 4.1.2 specifies fixes to the first three issues. 
[I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh] specifies a new Information Element to fix 
the last issue. Other Information Elements are defined in 
[I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh] to address some other limitations such as 
lack of reporting of extension header chains or aggregate extension headers 
length.

Note that some implementations may not be able to export all observed extension 
headers in a Flow because of a hardware of software limit (see, e.g., 
[I-D.ietf-6man-eh-limits]. The specification of the ipv6ExtensionHeaders 
Information Element does not discuss whether it covers all enclosed extension 
headers or only up to a limit. A solution to this shortcoming is also defined 
in [I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-tcpo-v6eh].
==

Rather than duplicating text, I added this new sentence: "Refer also to 
{{Section 4.1.1 of ?I-D.ietf-opsawg-ipfix-fixes}} for more details."

> 187         packet of this Flow contained the respective IPv6
> extension
> 
> nits: s/contained/contains
> 

[Med] Fixed. Thanks.
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