Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-opsec-ipv6-host-scanning-07: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsec-ipv6-host-scanning/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Nice document you have here. Just two really small comments, neither of which needs any response, and both of which you can ignore if you prefer. An observation: Three times, you say that something is "obvious", and this can come across as condescending -- and can be frustrating to a reader for whom it isn't obvious. I suggest omitting that, so - In Section 3.1.1.1, change "Firstly, as it should be obvious from the algorithm described above" to "Firstly, as shown by the algorithm described above". - In Section 3.1.3.2, change "For obvious reasons, the search space for addresses following" to "The search space for addresses following". - In Section 3.3, change "Obviously, a number of other network reconnaissance vectors" to "A number of other network reconnaissance vectors". -- Section 3.1.1.1 -- An observation, for which the response is probably "everyone knows this, so no change is needed," but please think about it for a fleeting moment: 1. The "Universal" bit (bit 6, from left to right) of the address is set to 1 Bit 6, starting from 0, or from 1? The answer (which I can see from the example) is "starting from 0." Firstly, as it should be obvious from the algorithm described above, two bytes (bytes 4-5) of the resulting address always have a fixed value (0xff, 0xfe) Bytes 4-5, starting from 0 or from 1? The answer (which I can see from the example) is "starting from 1." The fact that the origins differ makes me think that it'd be nice if that were made clear. Please give it a thought, to say that bits are numbered from left to right starting at 0, and bytes are numbered from left to right starting at 1. _______________________________________________ OPSEC mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsec
