Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-p2psip-share-09: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-p2psip-share/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- I have a one set of substantive comments/questions, and some editorial comments: Substantive: - I'm confused about the validation procedure. In step one, is this the user name of the user attempting to write the resource? In step 5, I do not understand how this terminates. Which ACL item is the "previously selected" one. If that refers to the one selected in the last iteration of steps 3 and 4, how do you know there are not more ACL items to iterate through? Editorial: -1, first paragraph, first sentence: s/that/, which -- recurring singular plural mismatch "resources with a variable name". -1, 2nd paragraphs: "It transfers the authorization..." What is the antecedent for "it"? -3. First paragraph after numbered list, "user called Authorized Peer": missing article. -3.1, 3rd paragraph: Is the SHALL appropriate? Is an authorized user actually required to access the array in the first place? - 6.5, first paragraph: Does the MAY grant permission, or is it a statement of fact? -6.6, paragraphs 3 and 4: Are the MUSTs appropriate? Are there not other (perhaps application specific) reasons one might choose not to write the value? -- 2nd paragraph from end: The MUST seems more like a statement of fact. (E.g. "The resulting ... integer is used...") - 4.1, last paragraph: s/implementations/implementors - 4.2, definition of res_name_ext: The sentence starting with "This name serves..." is hard to parse. -5.1, 4th paragraph (paragraph after example) : s/witch/which _______________________________________________ P2PSIP mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/p2psip
