These are good nits, thanks. Chairs. Do you want them worked on now or later?
A > -----Original Message----- > From: Pce [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Dhruv Dhody > Sent: 23 May 2014 08:27 > To: [email protected] > Cc: [email protected] > Subject: [Pce] Regarding draft-ietf-pce-questions-05 > > Hi Authors, > > Please find some nits/comments which may be addressed as part of the next > update, possibly triggered by responsible AD or IESG reviews. > > Title Page Header > s/Network Working Group/PCE Working Group > > Abstract > Add acronym - Virtual Network Topology Manager (VNTM) & > Hierarchical PCE (H-PCE). > > Sec 1. Introduction > Add acronym - Virtual Network Topology Manager (VNTM) > > Sec 1.1 Terminology > OLD > Readers are assumed to be thoroughly familiar with terminology > defined in defined in [RFC4655], [RFC4726], [RFC5440], and > [RFC5623]. > NEW > Readers are assumed to be thoroughly familiar with terminology > defined in [RFC4655], [RFC4726], [RFC5440], [RFC5623], [RFC6805] > and [I-D.ietf-pce-stateful-pce]. > > Sec 2. What Is Topology Information? > Add acronym - objective functions (OF) > > Sec 3. How Is Topology Information Gathered? > s/some how/somehow > > Sec 5. How Do I Select Between PCEs? > Correct the spacing in the following line: > OLD: > A PCC may also vary which PCE it uses according to congestion > information reported by the PCEs using the Notification Object > and Notification Type[RFC5440] . > NEW: > A PCC may also vary which PCE it uses according to congestion > information reported by the PCEs using the Notification Object > and Notification Type [RFC5440]. > > Sec 8. Who Runs Or Owns a Parent PCE? > IMHO a bit of introduction about Parent PCE would help set the > tone. Something like this.. > > A Parent PCE as per [RFC6805] is responsible for selecting > inter-domain path by coordinating with child PCEs and > maintaining a domain topology map. > > Sec 12. Does H-PCE Solve The Internet? > s/layers/levels (better to be consistent and use the word level in > context of H-PCE) > > Sec 16. How Do Redundant Stateful PCEs Synchronize State? > s/issued described above/issue described above > > Sec 24. Where Does Policy Fit In? > > Policy enters into all aspect of the use of a PCE starting from > the very decision to use a PCE to delegate computation function > from the LSRs. > - Each PCC must select which computations will be delegated to a > PCE. > > Avoid the use of word delegate as it has another meaning in > context of stateful PCE. Perhaps use 'off-load'? > > - An Active PCE must have a policy relationship with its LSRs to > determine which LSPs can be modified or triggered, and what LSP > delegation is supported. > > Is 'what LSP' intentional? Shouldn't this be 'which LSP'? > > Sec 29. References > draft-ietf-pce-stateful-pce is considered an informative > reference. > > http://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/normative-informative.html > Normative references specify documents that must be read to > understand or implement the technology in the new RFC, or whose > technology must be present for the technology in the new RFC to > work. > > IMHO draft-ietf-pce-stateful-pce should be read to understand some > sections of this document. If that is true and you agree, Can a > "note and move on" [RFC4897] be applied in this case? > > -- > Some unexpanded acronyms - AS, LSP, ASBR, NMS, NETCONF, SONET, SDH. > -- > > Regards, > Dhruv > > --------------------------------------------------------------- > Dhruv Dhody > System Architect, > Huawei Technologies India Pvt. Ltd., > Banagalore > Mobile: +91-9845062422 > This e-mail and its attachments contain confidential information from HUAWEI, > which > is intended only for the person or entity whose address is listed above. Any use > of the > information contained herein in any way (including, but not limited to, total or > partial > disclosure, reproduction, or dissemination) by persons other than the intended > recipient(s) is prohibited. If you receive this e-mail in error, please notify the > sender by > phone or email immediately and delete it! > > > _______________________________________________ > Pce mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pce _______________________________________________ Pce mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pce
