Well, I may have gone a bit overboard (with the best of intentions, I assure you) in my previous post.
As you can see from my reply to Lasse's reworking of your image, I think his crop did wonders to the original, and I quite like it.
I do like the second one, though. It's got a different vibe, as the observer doesn't quite seem to have the apprehension that his body language would indicate in the first.
Whatever, they're both good shots (now that the first has been cropped). Again, I think I came on a bit strong in my first reply - sometimes I just "get the bit in my teeth" as it were, and go about rushing like a bull in a china shop (hey, a cliche metaphore and a cliche simile in the same sentence - not bad, eh? <g>)
cheers, frank
"The optimist thinks this is the best of all possible worlds. The pessimist fears it is true." -J. Robert Oppenheimer
From: bransky <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> Reply-To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: Re: First PAW -- Boys watching their friend..... Date: Sun, 07 Mar 2004 18:15:42 -0600
Frank, thank you for your thorough and helpful critique. I really appreciate it, and your points are well taken. I did
take a picture showing the face of the middle boy after the 1st shot, see link below. I like the other one better, but you
might see it differently. The boy with the bow is my son, he's used to me taking pictures, but the other two aren't, so I
sort of slunk around and grabbed these shots, and that's probably exactly why these in the end are just backyard snapshots,
albeit ones that bring a smile to my face.
Again, great to hear your thoughts and suggestions,
Aaron Bransky
http://www.photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=2191550&size=lg
>>>> (from Frank T.)
Unfortunately, it's due to that angle that things sort of fall apart for me.
Other than the title, it's really hard to see what the bow and arrow boy
is doing. Yes, I know we can see the target, but that's really not enough
of a clue for people like me <g>. I can't tell what he's up to.
We also can't see anyone's face - not that that's always a bad thing, but in
this case, I think that much of what's happening in the kids' minds could be
reflected on their faces. I know you were trying to get all three of them
in the shot, which idea has some merit, but in this case, it might have been
nice to get tight into one or more of their faces, or at least much closer
than you were.
Even though I posted previously saying I hate it when people tell me "I
would have taken the shot such-and-such a way", I'm going to come perilously
close to doing just that.
Next time, maybe forget about the target, and get beside the kids (like to
the left of the shooter). Try to get all three of them in profile (it looks
like they would have been nicely lined up for that). With a bit of moving
around, you might have been able to capture much more emotion than you did.
I think you saw a scene with lots of great elements, but didn't know what to
do with it - that's the impression I get anyway.
This isn't a bad shot, but to me (and this is just a personal opinion), you're really close to raising it from a backyard snapshot to a statement about boys and their toys. I think you wanted to, but for whatever reason didn't exactly know what to do.
OTOH, you may have shots on your disk that are closer to what I'm thinking, and if so, it would be great to see them.
And, again, I'm not saying what's ~bad~ about your shot, just thinking of looking at things differently if you're presented with an analagous situation in the future. Hope you don't mind the critique.<<<<<<<
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