Hi Steve,
I'd consider shooting in portrait orientation instead of landscape (since
the stuff on either side of her head isn't doing mauch for her portrait),
including more, if not all, of her chin. Move the plane of focus a little
farther back to cover her eyes and/or stop down enough to have her eyes and
nose in focus. I like really close portraits, but it seems as though most
people don't, so if that matters to you, you might try shooting with a
longer lens.
To me, her smile doesn't look uneasy, but her eyes do. You might consider
having her look at something not quite so in line with the camera or do a
three quarter portrait. Another option might be to have her look directly
at you but have her body turned a little away from you.
Happy shooting,
Dan
>http://pug.komkon.org/01may/sister.html
>
>This was my first portrait attempt, and I'd like to know what I could
>have done differently to produce "better" results. For instance, does
>the shallow DOF work, or should I have stopped down to include the rest
>of the hair? And what about the shadows on the face...does this detract
>from the image? I'm open to comments, critiques and criticisms, positive
>and negative, sugar-coated and harsh, as long as they are ultimately
>helpful in teaching me better technique, etc.
>
>Thanks in advance.
>
>Steve
>Rolla, MO
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