Mmmm ... not exactly. What I am saying is that the title takes away from what I think you're trying to do with this, and that while it may be stronger without the title, revisiting the scene and working with it some more may garner a stronger result and greater impact.
After thinking about the pic for a while, and viewing it a few times, I don't see enough "intrusion." I was expecting to see a photo showing more of nature - for example, more trees - as well as the man-made objects. Of course, this is only my interpretation of what you may have been trying to do. I do see another photo entitled "Nature's Intrusion," in which there might be similar columns and one or two small, bright colored flowers struggling to grow in their shadow. It's possible that, because of all your nature photographs, this one, which is essentially non-nature, throws me a little. But that's just me. Maybe you were trying for something other than what I perceive Shel > [Original Message] > From: Bruce Dayton > So are you saying that without a title it hits the mark? This is > something that I intend to revisit and see if I can improve upon this > at all. > SB> I think I understand what you're trying to do with this one, but, imo, it > SB> misses the mark (as i see the mark to be). I believe the photo could be > SB> stronger with a different (or even non-existent) title, as the title has > SB> led me to some expectations. It's nicely done from a technical point, > SB> that's for certain. > http://www.daytonphoto.com/PAW/bkd_4227.htm -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net
