I don't often comment on shots here, but this one caught my eye and I am doing this rather than starting to sort receipts etc. as a prelude to starting on the annual tax returns... It is a shot I would like to like. Taken in parts, I think it is a good subject, well rendered. But the way the parts go together leaves me dissatisfied. It was hard for me to find the "center" of the image. The empty space top-right draws the eye to it, with no benefit to anything else in the composition. The motorcycle is great, but again draws the eye from the store front. Both the left edge and the top-left seem chopped off, but against the light background it is actually hard to tell where the photo ends and the background starts. My suggestions would include: a) put a black border around the shot; b) crop more from the top; c) crop less from the right side so as to move the motorcycle into the frame further. Assuming that (c) is not an option, I would go back and reshoot, but from about 40-50 feet further to your left so that you are looking at the store at an angle, with the store in the visual foreground and the motorcycle and blank sky above it in the visual background. With a bit more scene showing to the right of the motorcycle. The alternative would be to tightly crop, or reshoot, with nothing but the first floor (ground floor) of the shop in the frame.
Stan On Feb 17, 2007, at 6:47 AM, John Whittingham wrote: > Shot this afternoon, with Tamron 28-75 @ 38mm. That's an original > Enfield > parked outside. > > http://www.photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=5606194 > > Large version: > > http://www.photo.net/photodb/photo?photo_id=5606194&size=lg > > > Comments and critique welcome. > > John > -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net
