I've been refraining from commenting so far but I figured I'd give you my thoughts. First it needs the color, to my eye this scene is all about the color and the contrast to the womans black attire, and you need to somehow bring out more detail in the womans dress. Secondly. the second crop is better compositionally. As you know you can't always get what you want with spontaneous street shooting. The graffiti is interesting and the whole scene might be worthy of a shot, but with the woman as the main subject I don't think you can get away with the first crop. I don't know how fast the bicyclist was moving but I would have tried to get a second shot as he left the frame, if the *ist-D was up to that that might have balanced it nicely told a slightly different story and allowed you to keep the graffiti. (I was going to put that in Pirate Lingo, but gave up after the first sentence. Arrr.
frank theriault wrote: > On 9/18/07, Bob W <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > >> I don't think it sucks, but it is unbalanced - too much weight at the >> left. I think it would still be unbalanced even without the cyclist. >> > > Right. > > Well. > > Of course. I was looking at all those colours, the graffiti, the > bright clothing, and although I cropped a bit off the left, I didn't > want to lose all that stuff. > > However, you're absolutely right about the "weight" of the pic. So, I > cropped a lot out. Then she looked lost, all dressed in black against > the bright coloured clothes. So I converted it to black and white, > which I think works in the crop (below). > > But then when I got to the office and looked at it on my work monitor, > I could see there's absolutely no detail in her black dress (amazing > how much detail I can see in my LCD monitor at home that just doesn't > show on my CRT monitor at work). I think I could fiddle with the > brightness/contrast a bit too. So, this is still a work in progress > (they all seem to be with digital; that's one thing I liked with film > - did I just use the past tense? - I shot, got prints, that was it!), > but I think I'm getting somewhere: > > http://tinyurl.com/ys74tp > > http://bp2.blogger.com/_EaTEtfR4WJw/RvEOo10U2eI/AAAAAAAAAuM/spT8bBB9_jk/s1600-h/sept_19+001.jpg > > I'm just not sure where... > > ;-) > > Oh yeah, I decided to change the title: The Fitting Room. More > streamlined and simple... > > Thanks for your input! > > cheers, > frank > > -- Remember, it’s pillage then burn. -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net
