Hi Boris, and welcome back to the fold. There's a struggle going on in that picture. The horizontal divisions are fine, based on the thirds, and that's ok, but needs something else to stop it being boring. Typically people put one spot in the frame of a picture like that - someone walking along the beach, perhaps, or a yacht sailing along. It's crucial in that situation to get the position of the dot correct with respect to the edges of the frame and the horizontal lines. I think in this picture your 2 dots are too close to the frame (and they are at different distances to their frame, which is unbalancing). You can probably recrop so that the dots are themselves somewhat closer to the vertical thirds.
Even so, there would still be something unsatisfactory about it. Whenever there are 2 dots of equal value in a picture the eye moves constantly between them, and forms a straight line. The line needs to have a satisfactory relationship with the frame and the rest of the picture. Here it does not and the restless effect contradicts the calm mood of the subject matter. There is no obvious relationship between or action linking the two dots (for example, someone walking a dog, or two windows, or 2 eyes), so it's hard to understand why you included them in the same frame except as formal elements of a composition, and there is still some work to do on the composition. Pictures with 2 dots like this are rarely successful. B > -----Original Message----- > From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of > Boris Liberman > Sent: 23 April 2012 05:05 > To: Pentax-Discuss Mail List > Subject: Boris PESO #17 - Layers > > Hi! > > Here is another: > http://pentax-ways.blogspot.com/2012/04/peso-2012-17-layers.html > > Be brutal and honest (just in case you forgotten my mantra :-) ) > > Boris > > -- > PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List > [email protected] > http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net > to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and > follow the directions. -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List [email protected] http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and follow the directions.
