applied, comments inline:

> On October 5, 2016 at 12:10 PM "friedrich.ramberger" <f.ramber...@proxmox.com>
> wrote:
> 
> 
> From: fritz <f.ramber...@proxmox.com>

Please use your full name instead of 'fritz'

> 
> Signed-off-by: fritz <f.ramber...@proxmox.com>

same here

> ---
>  pve-installation.adoc | 47 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++---------------------
>  1 file changed, 26 insertions(+), 21 deletions(-)
> 
> diff --git a/pve-installation.adoc b/pve-installation.adoc
> index 27f2d72..486f916 100644
> --- a/pve-installation.adoc
> +++ b/pve-installation.adoc
> @@ -2,27 +2,17 @@ Installing Proxmox VE
>  =====================
>  include::attributes.txt[]
>  
> -{pve} ships as a set of Debian packages, so you can simply install it
> -on top of a normal Debian installation, or download the installation
> -CD-ROM and use that to install {pve} on your hardware.
> -
> -Installing on top of an existing Debian installation looks easy, but
> -it presumes that you have correctly installed the base system, and you
> -know how you want to configure and use the local storage. Network
> -configuration is also completely up to you.
> -
> -In general, this is not trivial, especially when you use LVM or
> -ZFS. This is why we provide an installation CD-ROM for {pve}. That
> -installer just ask you a few questions, then partitions the local
> -disk(s), installs all required packages and configures the system
> +{pve} is based on Debian and comes with an installation CD-ROM 
> +which includes a complete Debian ("jessie" for Proxmox VE 4.x) system as 
> +well as all necessary Proxmox VE packages. The
> +installer just asks you a few questions, then partitions the local
> +disk(s), installs all required packages, and configures the system
>  including a basic network setup. You can get a fully functional system
> -within a few minutes, including the following:
> +within a few minutes. This is the preferred and recommended installation
> method.
>  
> -* Complete operating system (Debian Linux, 64-bit)
> -* Partition the hard drive with ext4 (alternative ext3 or xfs) or ZFS
> -* {pve} Kernel with LXC and KVM support
> -* Complete toolset
> -* Web based management interface
> +Alternatively, Proxmox VE can be installed on top of an existing Debian
> system. 
> +This option is only recommended for advanced users since detail knowledge
> about 
> +Proxmox VE is necessary.
>  
>  ifndef::wiki[]
>  
> @@ -34,7 +24,14 @@ endif::wiki[]
>  Using the {pve} Installation CD-ROM
>  -----------------------------------
>  
> -This is the preferred and recommended installation method.
> +Includes the following:

Please can we have a more elaborate start of this section?

> +
> +* Complete operating system (Debian Linux, 64-bit)
> +* Partition the hard drive with ext4 (alternative ext3 or xfs) or ZFS
> +* {pve} Kernel with LXC and KVM support
> +* Complete toolset
> +* Web based management interface
> +
>  
>  NOTE: By default, the complete server is used and all existing data is
>  removed.
> @@ -167,7 +164,7 @@ ifndef::wiki[]
>  Install {pve} on Debian
>  -----------------------
>  
> -{pve} ships as a set of Debian packages, so you can simply install it
> +{pve} ships as a set of Debian packages, so you can install it
>  on top of a normal Debian installation. After configuring the
>  repositories, you need to run:
>  
> @@ -177,6 +174,14 @@ apt-get update
>  apt-get install proxmox-ve
>  ----
>  
> +Installing on top of an existing Debian installation looks easy, but
> +it presumes that you have correctly installed the base system, and you
> +know how you want to configure and use the local storage. Network
> +configuration is also completely up to you.
> +
> +In general, this is not trivial, especially when you use LVM or
> +ZFS.
> +
>  You can find a detailed step by step howto on the
>  {webwiki-url}Install_Proxmox_VE_on_Debian_Jessie[wiki].
>  
> -- 
> 2.1.4

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