hi,
On Tue, Sep 10, 2019 at 11:22:04AM +0200, Aaron Lauterer wrote: > Polished phrasing > > Signed-off-by: Aaron Lauterer <a.laute...@proxmox.com> > --- > sysadmin.adoc | 40 +++++++++++++++------------------------- > 1 file changed, 15 insertions(+), 25 deletions(-) > > diff --git a/sysadmin.adoc b/sysadmin.adoc > index e045610..9592c4a 100644 > --- a/sysadmin.adoc > +++ b/sysadmin.adoc > @@ -5,31 +5,21 @@ ifndef::manvolnum[] > :pve-toplevel: > endif::manvolnum[] > > -{pve} is based on the famous https://www.debian.org/[Debian] Linux > -distribution. That means that you have access to the whole world of > -Debian packages, and the base system is well documented. The > +The following sections will focus on common virtualization tasks and explain > the > +{pve} specifics regarding the administration and management of the host > machine. > + > +{pve} is based on https://www.debian.org/[Debian] GNU/Linux with additional maybe [Debian GNU/Linux] is better > +repositories to provides the {pve} related packages. This means that the full s/to provides/for > +range of Debian packages is available as well as security updates and bug > fixes. s/as well as/including > +{pve} provides it's own Linux kernel based on the Ubuntu kernel. It has all > the > +necessary virtualization and container featues enabled and includes s/featues/features > +https://zfsonlinux.org[ZFS] and serveral extra hardware drivers. s/serveral/several > + > +For other topics not included in the following sections, please refer to the > +Debian documentation. The > https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[Debian > -Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online, and provides a > -comprehensive introduction to the Debian operating system (see > -xref:Hertzog13[]). > - > -A standard {pve} installation uses the default repositories from > -Debian, so you get bug fixes and security updates through that > -channel. In addition, we provide our own package repository to roll > -out all {pve} related packages. This includes updates to some > -Debian packages when necessary. > - > -We also deliver a specially optimized Linux kernel, where we enable all > -required virtualization and container features. That kernel includes > -drivers for http://zfsonlinux.org/[ZFS], and several hardware drivers. > -For example, we ship Intel network card drivers to support their > -newest hardware. > - > -The following sections will concentrate on virtualization related > -topics. They either explain things which are different on {pve}, or > -tasks which are commonly used on {pve}. For other topics, please refer > -to the standard Debian documentation. > - > +Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online, and provides a comprehensive > +introduction to the Debian operating system (see xref:Hertzog13[]). > > ifdef::wiki[] > > @@ -38,7 +28,7 @@ See Also > > * link:/wiki/Package_Repositories[Package Repositories] > > -* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration] > +* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration] > > * link:/wiki/System_Software_Updates[System Software Updates] > > -- > 2.20.1 > > > _______________________________________________ > pve-devel mailing list > pve-devel@pve.proxmox.com > https://pve.proxmox.com/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pve-devel > _______________________________________________ pve-devel mailing list pve-devel@pve.proxmox.com https://pve.proxmox.com/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pve-devel