On 17/09/2020 08:51, Lars Eggert wrote:
Hello,
this email announces a Working Group Last Call (WGLC) for the following QUIC
documents:
* Version-Independent Properties of QUIC
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-quic-invariants-30
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I have read Version-Independent Properties of QUIC (-30) in the WGLC and
think this is ready, I found 3 editorial comments that might need
consideration after the WGLC:
(i) I suggest the introduction for this spec starts abruptly. Is it
worth considering one sentence top explain what QUIC is, in case someone
read this document first? - One possible solution could be to move the
text in section 3 to section 1? (To me, the section 3 text does not need
to come after the Section 2 definitions.)
(ii) Does this read better with /for/ moved within the sentence?
OLD:/At the endpoint, the connection ID is used to identify which QUIC
connection the packet is intended for./
NEW:/At the endpoint, the connection ID is used to identify the QUIC
connection for which the packet is intended./
(iii) I see the desire to emphasise the “NOT”, but I query if this is
correct usage of a RFC2119 keyword in Appendix A?:
/The following statements are NOT guaranteed to be true for every QUIC
version:/
Best wishes,
Gorry
