Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation-12

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Robert Sparks for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/q4nfiA-lk3-dpm66IdFh8oGUOr0).

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 1, paragraph 2
```
al versions are broadly similar to the the previous version. This specificat
                                   ^^^^^^^
```
Possible typo: you repeated a word.

#### Section 4, paragraph 5
```
ated version. If the client would have selected a different version, the cli
                            ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
Did you mean "had selected"?

## Notes

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[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
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