Hi,
Thank you for this work. I find the document readable and understandable.
Some comments:
Abstract:
- In this sentence "A key chain is... algorithm", I would add "A key chain
is... algorithm (authentication or encryption)".
Section 1. Introduction:
I would like to have an example on this statement:
" In some applications, the protocols do not use the key chain element key
directly, but rather a key derivation function is used to derive a
short-lived key from the key chain element key. e.g...." --> maybe
draft-bhatia-karp-short-lived-keys-00?
Section 1.1-
-I would add here the reference to RFC 6020, something like:
"The terminology for describing YANG data models is found in [RFC6020].
...
1.1.1. Tree Diagrams
A simplified graphical representation of the data model is used in
the YANG modules specified in this document. The meaning of the
symbols in these diagrams is as follows:
Brackets "[" and "]" enclose list keys.
Abbreviations before data node names: "rw" means configuration
data (read-write) and "ro" state data (read-only).
Symbols after data node names: "?" means an optional node, "!"
means a presence container, and "*" denotes a list and leaf-list.
Parentheses enclose choice and case nodes, and case nodes are also
marked with a colon (":").
Ellipsis ("...") stands for contents of subtrees that are not
shown." source of the text:
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-vanderstok-roll-mpl-yang-01
- even when it is pretty obvious, I would add a reference to the key
definition [RFC4949 - page 171]
Section 5:
It is empty, you mention some related work in section 2, but maybe you
could add in here a tree diagram such as the one showed in
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-netconf-server-model-09#section-3
Section 7
-For the XML-REGISTRY I would add a table with suggested values for the
respective columns of ns registry: ID, URI, Filename, Reference [
http://www.iana.org/assignments/xml-registry/xml-registry.xhtml#ns]
-For YANG Module Names registry, you have name, namespace, prefix and
reference, only there is a column missing which is module, [
http://www.iana.org/assignments/yang-parameters/yang-parameters.xhtml#yang-parameters-1
]
- I would add an informative reference to RFC5226. "Guidelines for Writing
an IANA Considerations Section in RFCs"
Additional questions:
- Should RFC 6518 be mentioned in this document? like the Cryptographic
Keys Life Cycle?
- What about ECC? Should it be included or it is not-related/out-of-scope?
Thank you,
Ines.
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