Hi,

Thanks for your review.
The v07 I just posted addresses your comments.

Brgds,


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From: Melinda Shore [mailto:[email protected]] 
Sent: Thursday, October 05, 2017 00:09
To: [email protected]
Cc: [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected]
Subject: Secdir last call review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-uloop-delay-06

Reviewer: Melinda Shore
Review result: Has Nits

This document describes a mechanism to mitigate against failures stemming from 
the formation of "microloops" during a re-routing convergence, as described in 
RFC 5715.  Modulo some mechanical problems with language usage (i.e.
grammatical errors) and some missing definitions, the document clearly 
describes the problem it is addressing and the proposed solution.

The security considerations section is very clear about why the authors believe 
no new attacks are introduced by this mechanism, and it is credible

Sections 4 and 5 represent the core of the document and are very clear - a very 
nice piece of specification.

It would be helpful to have a terminology section, or to expand some of the 
acronyms in-line (LFA, for example).

For some reason the grammatical errors are clustered towards the front of the 
document but there are many scattered throughout:

Section 1, first paragraph singular/plural mismatch: "Based on network 
analysis, local failure make up a significant portion of the micro-forwarding 
loops"

Section 1, second paragraph unidiomatic use of "the topology"

Section 2, first paragraph unidiomatic use of "high damages"

Section 2.1, first paragraph needs an article on "IGP shortcut"

Same paragraph, doesn't need an article on "the router C"

Same paragraph, "nexthop" should be two words

Item 1 in 2.1, needs an article before "preprogrammed FRR path", also run-on 
sentence needs to be split or a conjunction inserted

Item 3 in 2.1, "no more" should be "no longer", and "encapsulate anymore"
should be "does not continue to encapsulate"

Section 2.1, last paragraph: "The protection enabled by fast-reroute is working 
perfectly, but ensures a protection, by definition, only until the PLR has 
converged." is somewhat unclear

Section 3, third paragraph: first comma is unnecessary.  Also, "local only"
should be "local-only"

Section 8.2, first paragraph: "associating timing" should be "associated 
timing".

Also in section 8.2, the message chart header is separated from the actual 
contents by a page break, and that should be remedied

Section 8.3, first paragraph: "that happens" should be "that happen".  Also, 
"without further delaying route insertion" would be more idiomatic than 
"without delaying route insertion anymore"

Section 9.1, throughout: "nexthop" should be "next hop"

Section 9.1, first bullet item: "only have one" should be "only has one" (or 
"has only one")

Section 10: "a good behavior" should be "good behavior"


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