William Stein wrote: > On Thu, May 1, 2008 at 4:05 PM, Robert Bradshaw > <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: >> On May 1, 2008, at 2:51 PM, William Stein wrote: >> >> > Hi, >> > >> > I wrote a new version of my ISSAC talk abstract. What do you think: >> > >> > http://sage.math.washington.edu/home/was/tmp/abstract.pdf >> >> I think the previous abstract (version 2) is much better--this >> abstract seems more a reaction to the recent threads on sage-devel > > Thanks for your patience with my experiments. Please see abstract number 3: > > http://sage.math.washington.edu/home/was/tmp/abstract3.pdf > > Let me know what you think. It will probably piss off everybody, but > I guarantee you it is the most honest thing I've ever written about Sage.
I finally got a few minutes to read one of your abstracts. I know nothing of the ISAAC attendees other than what's been said here, so I'll let others comment on the appropriateness more fully. Overall, I thought it sounded interesting, but was too informal and "I"-focused for a conference talk, but it made for an interesting read for me, someone already interested in Sage. Some grammar nitpicks (I hope this isn't a case of premature optimization/nitpicking here): paragraph 2: far far -> far (it sounds better with just one far.) paragraph 3: tallented -> talented guys -> maybe something just a tad bit more formal? ... -> . (cut the ellipsis) paragraph 5: and in November -> In November (start new sentence) list: second item should be singular "a set of interfaces" to be consistent with the other items next paragraph: delete "ever" (it reads better) second to last paragraph: combining -> combine * delete the remark to OpenMath; no need to say what we don't have and don't plan to incorporate * range of programs are tied -> range of programs is tied * you use pseudo-tty and pseudotty; change one to be consistent * others -> other * anywhere from -> from anywhere Wow, that last paragraph was rather bold and I'd probably reword it, but you've heard enough advice to do that :). At the very least, I would change "need" to "want" and delete the "drop everything" phrase. Jason --~--~---------~--~----~------------~-------~--~----~ To post to this group, send email to sage-devel@googlegroups.com To unsubscribe from this group, send email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] For more options, visit this group at http://groups.google.com/group/sage-devel URLs: http://www.sagemath.org -~----------~----~----~----~------~----~------~--~---
