Ah! it's that darn conveyance that's the problem.
-C --- In [email protected], "belsidus2000" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Carole: > > Thank you for your kind words but my suggestion is but another way > that the story could be handled. Any way discussed here that I have > seen would be effective if properly conveyed. > > Chris > > --- In [email protected], "Carole McDonnell" > <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > Wow, Chris! > > > > See: your ideas show the difference in how I think and in how I > > should think. I was quite content to have him see the images in > the > > mirror and NOT do anything except suffer inwardly about > it...making > > the story only psychological and maybe a study in madness. But you > > actually have him responding to the image and feeling compelled to > do > > something. Which takes the story from the passive "Oh my gosh, > he's > > losing his mind" theme to the "Oh my gosh! how far will this guy > go > > with his delusions!" theme. > > > > I swear! I HAVE got to learn how to think like more of a plotter. > Or > > I'll be collecting even more rejection letters. Thanks. You've > given > > me a lot to think about...not in the story per se (although you > did) > > but more importantly in the reaction of character to external (or > > internal) horror. > > > > -C ------------------------ Yahoo! Groups Sponsor --------------------~--> What would our lives be like without music, dance, and theater? Donate or volunteer in the arts today at Network for Good! http://us.click.yahoo.com/pkgkPB/SOnJAA/Zx0JAA/DtIolB/TM --------------------------------------------------------------------~-> Community email addresses: Post message: [email protected] Subscribe: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subscribe Digest Mode: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Unsubscribe: [EMAIL PROTECTED]: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/SciFiNoir_Lit/ Yahoo! Groups Links <*> To visit your group on the web, go to: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/SciFiNoir_Lit/ <*> To unsubscribe from this group, send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] <*> Your use of Yahoo! Groups is subject to: http://docs.yahoo.com/info/terms/
