[Acme] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-acme-subdomains-04

[Reese Enghardt via Datatracker]

Reviewer: Reese Enghardt
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-acme-subdomains-04
Reviewer: Reese Enghardt
Review Date: 2022-11-16
IETF LC End Date: 2022-11-21
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The document is well-written, clear, and to the point. I only found a
few nits with opportunities for clarification.

Major issues: None.

Minor issues:

Section 2:

" Fully-Qualified Domain Name (FQDN): This is often just a clear way
  of saying the same thing as "domain name of a node", as outlined
  above.  However, the term is ambiguous."

These two sentences appear to contradict each other - Is the term clear or
ambiguous? I suggest removing the word "clear" to simply state how the term is
commonly used, and then point out the ambiguity.

Section 3:

"6. server replies with an updated order object […]"

Is this updated order object similar to the "authorization" objects?
When it says "authorizations" in step 2, are these also objects?
I suggest defining the term "object", e.g., in Section 2, and then
double-checking that this term is applied consistency in the document.

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 4.3:

"If the client is unable to fulfill authorizations against parent domain"
-> "If the client is unable to fulfill authorizations against a parent domain"



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Re: [Acme] Call for adoption for draft-bweeks-acme-device-attest

[Richard Barnes]

I have read the draft, and it seems well thought through.  Especially if
there is implementor interest, this seems like a sane thing for the WG to
adopt.

On Tue, Nov 15, 2022 at 2:53 PM Carl Wallace 
wrote:

> I’ve read the draft and support its adoption.
>
>
>
> *From: *Acme  on behalf of Deb Cooley <
> debcool...@gmail.com>
> *Date: *Tuesday, November 15, 2022 at 1:01 PM
> *To: *IETF ACME 
> *Cc: *
> *Subject: *[Acme] Call for adoption for draft-bweeks-acme-device-attest
>
>
>
> This will be a three week call for adoption ending on 6 Dec. (because of
> holidays in the US).   Please speak up either for or against adopting this
> draft.
>
> Thanks,
> Deb and Yoav.
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