I see my previous concerns fully addressed by the -12.
Thanks Joe for the much better replacement text!
(Admittedly, I've been too conservative, in an attempt to preserve
as much of the previous language in that paragraph as possible.)
So this should now actually be fodder for the IESG to digest,
A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
This draft is a work item of the Domain Name System Operations Working Group of
the IETF.
Title : Locally-served DNS Zones
Author(s) : M. Andrews
Filename: