Hi, Version 10 addresses all of my comments on version 09.
Thanks! Ben. On Apr 1, 2014, at 6:14 PM, Vízdal Aleš <ales.viz...@t-mobile.cz> wrote: > Dear Ben, all, > > Many thanks for your review. An updated I-D has been submitted. > > Please see inline. > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Ben Campbell [mailto:b...@nostrum.com] > > Sent: Friday, March 21, 2014 8:25 PM > > To: draft-ietf-v6ops-64share....@tools.ietf.org > > Cc: gen-art@ietf.org Team (gen-art@ietf.org) > > Subject: Gen-ART LC/Telechat Review of draft-ietf-v6ops- > > 64share-09 > > > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For > > background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < > > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD > > before posting a new version of the draft. > > > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-64share-09 > > Reviewer: Ben Campbell > > Review Date: 2014-03-21 > > IETF LC End Date: long time ago > > IESG Telechat date: 2014-03-27 > > > > Note: I somehow missed this assignment at last call time. > > Therefore this review serves as both a last call and an IESG > > telechat review. > > > > Summary: This draft is mostly ready for publication as an > > informational RFC. I have a few editorial comments that might > > be worth considering prior to publication. > > > > Major issues: None > > > > Minor issues: None > > > > Nits/editorial comments: > > > > -- Section 1, paragraph 1: > > > > Can you elaborate on what it means to "extend" The prefix to > > a LAN link? Are we talking about routing IPv6 traffic from > > other local devices (on the LAN) across the 3gpp link, for > > example, like one might do when tethering devices to a phone > > or mobile hotspot? > > Yes, this is the case. > > > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? > > > > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? > > Done. > > > -- paragraph 2: "This can be achieved by receiving the Router > > Advertisement (RA) [RFC4861] announced globally unique /64 > > IPv6 prefix from the 3GPP radio interface and then > > advertising" > > > > What does these things. The UE? > > Yes, the UE. Ref to the UE has been added. > > > Please expand RA on first mention. > > Done. > > > > > -- section 3, R-1: > > > > Please expand SLAAC on first use. > > Done. > > > -- section 4.2, 1st paragraph: "The 3GPP RA /64 prefix > > information is used to configure NDP on the LAN and assigns > > itself an address on the LAN link." > > > > The prefix information assigns itself an address? I don't > > think that's what you mean to say. > > Fixed, please review. > > > -- section 4.2, step 7: > > > > Please expand DAD on first use. > > Done. > > Cheers, > Ales > > Zásady komunikace, které společnost T-Mobile Czech Republic a.s. užívá při > sjednávání smluv, jsou uvedeny zde http://www.t-mobile.cz/zasady. Není-li v > zásadách uvedeno jinak, nepředstavuje tato zpráva konečný návrh na uzavření > či změnu smlouvy ani přijetí takového návrhu. The communication principles > which T-Mobile Czech Republic a.s. applies when negotiating contracts are > defined here http://www.t-mobile.cz/principles. Unless otherwise stated in > the principles, this message does not constitute the final offer to contract > or an amendment of a contract or acceptance of such offer. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
