I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-smime-escertid-04.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2007-01-30 IETF LC End Date: 2007-01-31 IESG Telechat date: 2007-02-02? Summary: Not Ready Comments: - a security consideration section is mandatory. - the introduction fails to explain how the hash is used even the idea is very simple (identify without ambiguity a certificate by its hash). - and its fails too to explain the choices. - 1 page 3: the text is painful to read. - 1 page 3 ESSCertID -> ESSCertID, - why the version 2 is described before the version 1? - 2 page 4: the text is painful. - 2 page 4: SHA-1 able -> SHA-1 to be able - 2 page 4: I.e. -> I.e., - 3 and 5: why the "authorization certificates" became the "certificates"? - 3 and 5: what are the real differences between 3 and 5 texts? Is it possible to factorize them in order to make common and different parts easy to find? - 3 page 6: asserts apply -> asserts to apply - 3 page 6: SigningCertificate -> SigningCertificateV2 or perhaps you mean "SigningCertificateV1 or SigningCertificateV2". I suggest to introduce SigningCertificate as the "or" of the two versions. - 4 page 8: choose between hashAlg and hashAlgorithm - 4 page 8: e.g. -> e.g., - 4 page 8: I don't like the definition of issuer even it is copied from RFC 2634. For instance GeneralNames is not GeneralName, and the consequences must be drawn/explained... - 5 pages 9 and 10: what are the differences with RFC 2634 and why? - 7 page 12: PKIXCERT and RFC3280 are the same document! - I didn't check the ASN.1 (seems OK according to a diff with RFC's one). Is there a recommended tool? I know there is one for MIBs. - Author page 18: USA in the address, +1 in the phone number. Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
