Hi Jamil,

All good catches!  Thanks for the review.  I updated accordingly.

Xuelei

On Jan 29, 2021, at 4:41 PM, Jamil Nimeh 
<jamil.j.ni...@oracle.com<mailto:jamil.j.ni...@oracle.com>> wrote:


Hi Xuelei, looks good overall, some minor suggestions only:

  *   1st paragraph: Change "...block extensions used in client side" and 
"...used to block extensions used in server side" to say "...used in the 
client." and "...used in the server." (you can remove the "side" words).
  *   1st paragraph: if you use "neither" then you should follow it with "nor" 
rather than "or"
  *   The 3rd paragraph's leading sentence is a fragment.  You might be able to 
remove that sentence entirely without changing the meaning behind the 
paragraph.  With that first sentence removed and the "But" from the next 
sentence also omitted I think it reads a little more smoothly, at least to my 
eyes.
  *   I'm not sure if we have any style guide rules concerning contractions in 
release notes, but I think changing "don't" -> "do not" also reads better for 
these kinds of things.

--Jamil

On 1/29/2021 4:23 PM, Xue-Lei Fan wrote:
Hi,

May I have the following release note reviewed:
   https://bugs.openjdk.java.net/browse/JDK-8260310


Thanks,
Xuelei


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